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WhiteDragon
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0 posted 2001-07-10 11:46 PM


when i said i love, i swear that it was true,
and when i said forever, that's what i'd planned to do,
i guess i AM a liar, but i never meant to be,
i was blinded by your beauty, i guess i couldn't see,
see that things could change, in the the blinking of an eye,
i never meant to hurt you, can't stand to see you cry,
you say you don't believe me, that my love was never real,
but you know i always tell you, exactly how i feel,
and now i'm saying this, from the bottom of my heart,
that our love can be no longer, thought we both did our part,
i really hate to say it, but what we had is done,
i truly thought that maybe, you could be the one,
but times have changed and so have i, there's nothing left to do,
and i hope you won't forget me, even though we're through,
the times we had, the good and bad, the love I had for you.

Jeremy

© Copyright 2001 WhiteDragon - All Rights Reserved
Paula Finn
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1 posted 2001-07-11 12:56 PM


Sometimes its hard to hold onto the good memories...the hurt and the anger get in the way...nice write Jeremy
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2 posted 2001-07-11 01:18 AM


it does take some time....there needs to be healing time, and forgiving time....eventually, the good memories are what we all try to remember   I liked this  
VAS
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3 posted 2001-07-11 02:23 AM


yep, but it's really hard for the one left behind, eventually the good times, good memories surface for the one who stayed, I wonder if they hang around at all for the one who does the leaving...

written well

Bill Charles
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4 posted 2001-07-11 08:21 AM


WhiteDragon - how true this writing is. To love, to be true, and then it's gone, and perhaps never knowing why...

BC

WhiteDragon
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5 posted 2001-07-11 09:40 AM


Hey all, thanks for your replies and support.  I love you guys *tear*  hehe...ooh, look, my 50th post!   God Bless, Jeremy
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6 posted 2001-07-11 09:46 AM


nicely done... it is hard not to let anger and hurt get in the way of the good memories..

I enjoyed

MARK V SHELDON
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7 posted 2001-07-11 11:54 AM


I have found two essential ingredients in ANY relationship:  Honesty and Communication.  If either is missing...  Sounds like you were honest.  Truth can "suck", but ultimately, it's the one constant that will remain.  Good write, dealing with a difficult topic...

-MVS

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8 posted 2001-07-11 12:59 PM


Sigh, I can see this one from both sides of the pen.
Sandra

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9 posted 2001-07-11 11:02 PM


Jeremy~
Very well said.
The memories do stay with you ...
and that's a good thing, I think.
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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JamesMichael
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10 posted 2001-07-12 04:39 AM


I suppose it is best not to say you will love someone forever too soon as it takes a relationship of a long duration to really get in touch with the feelings that will remain after the dust has settled...I find myself thinking these thoughts in the beginning of a relationship before I really know the other person...James
dgvarner
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11 posted 2001-08-19 05:07 PM


hey there jeremy    working from back to front here..glad i am, as i found this awesome piece from you    

relationships..*sigh*  sometimes theyre tough arent they..but keep that communication, that honesty going..just think a while next time, lest you whisper "i love you's" too soon..then you cant be called a liar..(even if youre not one..    )  hey..nice pic..O-town, you say?  ?

great write..

hugs, g

~dgvarner/fallen rain~

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as each day unfolds,
we see less of the shadow
and more of the sun"  -unknown

snowpants
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12 posted 2001-08-19 06:04 PM


Nicely written, Jeremy...I especially enjoyed the rhyming, how it was not forced...great work...

sp  

can I see my world without you in it?
baby, not for a single minute...

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