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Kosetsu
Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 450
Alabama, USA

0 posted 2002-09-11 10:20 AM

Don't mind me,
I'm just a fool
Trying to just
Keep my cool
And to not think
About your eyes,
Your hair, even
Your tired sighs,
And most of all
Your perfect heart
And of the ache
Each time we part
When daylight fades
To night's embrace,
Until my mind
Begins to race
With dreams of you;
A fantasy,
I'm just a fool,
So don't mind me.

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Not my typical style..but hey, it's a poem, and the first in a long time...

-Adam

Ceinwyn
Member Elite

since 2000-07-09

Posts 2175
VA

1 posted 2002-09-11 10:32 PM

I'm glad I check this out every once in awhile..funny stuff, kind of thinking about ya wondering what you were up to..writing I still see..and yes it might be a tad bit different from your regular poems but nonetheless you still got it

Kristen

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

Skyfire

Member Elite

since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

2 posted 2002-09-12 01:02 AM

Hmmm *thinks* I like your usual style better dude. I love the images you manage to come up with. This was well written though, and I did like the format. I just don't think it fits you, ya know?

*hugs* miss you man.
~Rhonda #1

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

3 posted 2002-09-12 04:13 AM

Kosetsu-
Well, I don't really know whether this 'fits you'
or not, but I DO know that I like it.
Very well written and I enjoyed the format.
Hugs,
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

4 posted 2002-09-12 08:30 AM

hey, since i really don't know wut ur "usual" style is, i'm just gonna say, keep it up cuz i liked this alot!

~Ur feelings never change, u just learn 2 hide them~

Jenn Cirrincione

Member Elite

since 2000-07-02

Posts 2107
Fl

5 posted 2002-09-12 02:22 PM

I like this Adam. This is different from your other stuff as I recall...but this is really well formatted. Simplistic and just really pretty.

Nice one.

Jenn

Why is it that we are at our most ingenius only when trying to destroy the things that keep us alive and thriving?

LyricFetish
Senior Member

since 2000-01-13

Posts 528
North Carolina

6 posted 2002-09-12 11:27 PM

I love the phrasing. Dividing your thoughts into short segments really made the poem more real. Mahvelous, dahling! lol

*~Meredith~*

"I can taste you on my lips
and smell you in my clothes"
*BHS

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