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Kevin

Senior Member

since 1999-11-02

Posts 729
Torrington, Ct, Usa

0 posted 2002-09-09 08:59 PM

Quixote chased windmills
Egyptians, the sun
Some men climb mountains
Others wield guns
Doctors give life
Judges bring death
Singers ride high on the waves of their breath
Some stand on diamonds
Drive faster cars
Some reminisce in their street corner bars
Search on the floor for their last weeks pay check
Cheer for the home team
Tip back their neck

And we race
And we race
And we race to be first

While quenching a lust
And ignoring a thirst

But you cannot race life
When you stand in the crowd
You can cheer as time passes
Quiet
Or Loud
But no matter how good or how strong or how proud
Time will never turn back
It just isn’t allowed

I'm on my feet, I'm on the floor, I'm good to go
All I need is just to hear a song I know

[This message has been edited by Kevin (09-11-2002 03:06 PM).]

devinechild22
Senior Member

since 2002-08-28

Posts 571

1 posted 2002-09-09 09:36 PM

hey! great poem. i really liked it

i think u r a great writer. i`m gonna look for more of your stuff right now! lol no really u r a great writer!
allison

devinechild22
Senior Member

since 2002-08-28

Posts 571

2 posted 2002-09-09 09:38 PM

cute too! lol

Kevin

Senior Member

since 1999-11-02

Posts 729
Torrington, Ct, Usa

3 posted 2002-09-09 10:26 PM

Thanks, *blush* but dont go looking through my old stuff, I'm still learning

layla
Member

since 2000-11-19

Posts 74

4 posted 2002-09-09 11:39 PM

THIS IS JUST MY STYLE, I REALLY LIKED IT, AND U ARE CUTE,,,LOL

Riley

Senior Member

since 2002-07-18

Posts 1038
in the pouring rain

5 posted 2002-09-10 07:44 AM

Hey,
I thought this was a good piece. I really liked the rhyming scheme. It flowed really well will the poem. This is my fav. line.

While quencing a lust
And ignoring a thirst.

( my spelling STINKS )

Anyways, great piece.

Ri

~*Theres a sparkle in your eye that only i see, and theres a place in your heart where only i wanna be*~

anya
Member

since 2002-07-27

Posts 393
London, UK

6 posted 2002-09-10 12:45 PM

oh wow, this was so good, flowed well and there are some really clever lines in here, enjoyed this very much,
anya

deadeyes
Junior Member

since 2001-11-07

Posts 33

7 posted 2002-09-10 03:30 PM

I thought this poem was good..and the Quixote theme never seems to get old. I also liked your use of metaphors. A little uneven in terms of lines but then again poetry should be free versed.

"Silencio..no hay banda..no hay orquesta."
"We hear a band yet we don't see a band". It is all a recording."
"Silencio. It is all an illusion".

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