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Riley
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in the pouring rain

0 posted 2002-09-09 08:41 PM



look past my false image
and my ever present laugh
even deeper past my eyes
that tell unspoken secrets

to the little girl within
whos not ready to grow up
not ready to be responsible
couldn't have a commitment

but this little girl stays buried
deep in my heart
and you are the only one
to ever bring her out

sure my friends have seen her
but only a little bit
and my best friend knows her well
not as good as you seem to

everytime i want to say
i like you she says
yet it never passes these lips
that are so tightly clenched

this little girl likes you
to scared to know you do to
can't accept the fact that
she is only

a little girl

no more

no less

just that


~*Theres a sparkle in your eye that only i see, and theres a place in your heart where only i wanna be*~

[This message has been edited by Riley (09-09-2002 08:46 PM).]

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Kevin
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1 posted 2002-09-09 09:02 PM


good stuff ri

lets just get it out of the way *grammar/spelling*

aside from that
this has many layers,
it reads well the first time
and I thought that it was a bit contradictory at first, the little girl being scared of a relationship but at the same time being the head over heels in love one...but then I realized thats exactly what its like, and appreciated the poem alot more
thanks

Riley
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2 posted 2002-09-10 07:41 AM


Kevin: Thank you so much. My grammer and spelling has always been on the down side. . And yea, love is exactly like that. Scared yet loving the peron so badly. Kinda funny huh?


Ri

~*Theres a sparkle in your eye that only i see, and theres a place in your heart where only i wanna be*~

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