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deadeyes
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0 posted 09-08-2002 03:45 PM       View Profile for deadeyes   Email deadeyes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for deadeyes

The dead tress swim through the breeze
drifting beside the subconscious.
The gardenias stand on their feet
while the anonymous looks for it's trail.

Machines are running on ommissions
while the brightness sucks in the madness.
While rocks stare at the sculptures
finding a possibility through selection.

Yet, why is this entity?
This reason to swim into thoughts.
Is there an explanation to a mystery?
Or the unknown tries to explain a being.

A place where dead leaves sink
and metaphors scream for meaning.
A reason to freely arouse a posture
but a shade blurs it's purpose.

Where silent benches show their muses
and a puppet greets his insecurity.
While blood turns into solace
and a new scene unfolds.

"Silencio..no hay banda..no hay orquesta."
"We hear a band yet we don't see a band". It is all a recording."
"Silencio. It is all an illusion".

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Winston Froom
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1 posted 09-10-2002 09:49 AM       View Profile for Winston Froom   Email Winston Froom   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Winston Froom

Great post, as was to be expected.  I loved the way you incorporated some elements of nature to be inside something so small as the "subconcious". One of your main concerns in terms of the topic of the poem is clear and present, though the imagery might be somewhat complex. Excellent job, I can't believe I'm the first to comment on this piece. What is wrong with this forum? Can't you people learn to distinguish good poetry?
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