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Allysa

Senior Member

since 1999-11-09

Posts 1952
In an upside-down garden

0 posted 2002-09-06 09:47 AM

Start Here
walk away
enter
throught the
golden gates
and let
everything
fly
out the window
because
the broken ring
on my finger
can not justify
anything anymore
the wall has fallen
the city
torn down yesterday
cannot compare
to the stomped
feelings
to the rubble
in my head.
Let the bag of marbels fall.
I hope you trip.

ich bin schwul, ich bin jüdisch und ein Kommunist dazu, Ich bin schwarz und behindert, doch genauso Mensch wie du ~Wizo

HopelessRomanticGuy
Member

since 2001-08-17

Posts 495
LI, New York

1 posted 2002-09-06 10:33 PM

Wow, whatever he did, it's really bad. I like the poem though! It's really well written! Keep up the good work! Hope to read more! Later!

-Rich

After Love comes Pain, then Love, Then Pain, then Love, then Pain..... does anyone else see a pattern here? Oh well, can't say it's not worth it.

katherine
Member

since 2000-06-10

Posts 365
Canberra Australia

2 posted 2002-09-08 03:13 AM

so you're cranky then. this is really good you can feel the emotion steaming off it. good work! hope it helped you feel better.

EleanorMoonbaby
Member

since 2002-09-02

Posts 202
England, UK

3 posted 2002-09-08 02:27 PM

I liked this. I think we all have people we want to trip over on marbles! This was really well written.

In the beginning, the Universe was made. This has angered a lot of people and has been widely regarded as a bad move- Douglas Adams

Ceinwyn
Member Elite

since 2000-07-09

Posts 2175
VA

4 posted 2002-09-08 04:54 PM

hrmm...dang...frustration, anger seething through your words..and whatever verbs and adjectives and whatnot

Kristen

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

Allysa

Senior Member

since 1999-11-09

Posts 1952
In an upside-down garden

5 posted 2002-09-09 10:42 AM

Surprisingly enough, I'm not mad, I was not mad when I wrote this and there was not anything that occured to make me write this. This is just a random piece of work.

Thank you all.

ich bin schwul, ich bin jüdisch und ein Kommunist dazu, Ich bin schwarz und behindert, doch genauso Mensch wie du ~Wizo

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