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Child of the Stars
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0 posted 09-04-2002 10:03 PM       View Profile for Child of the Stars   Email Child of the Stars   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Child of the Stars


Barefoot on gravel, he wanders
full-blast, half-mast but laughing.
Not a care.
Falling's potential, but then
so is the other way.
Skipping from run-in to all the other
run-down downs and roundabouts,
brothers aren't friends,
just brothers.

Shoot 'em long before they're dead
from hunger, he says--
agree or face his.
I agree and logic wins
like logic never does.

Four guitars strapped on his back,
one for each emotion
(you know, hate and love and trust
and marriage, growing like mushrooms).
Can't let those shoes melt
'cause walking's real this time.


[This message has been edited by Child of the Stars (09-05-2002 07:15 AM).]

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1 posted 09-05-2002 04:53 AM       View Profile for Marshalzu   Email Marshalzu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marshalzu's Home Page   View IP for Marshalzu

This is such a great poem, I just love the imagery that you have used, thank you for sharing it with us

Andrew

"I still feel the pain in my heart, what once was pure is now diluted" - Biffy Cylro

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Carly dear, you still gotta explain this one to me. I like it, even if the meaning of it flies right over my head. Love the imagery you used, and the flow is great. The wording of this is just fantastic. You really did a great job here.
Love you,
tiff

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Getting away, isn't Running away.

"The hurt that you try to hide, is killing me."

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3 posted 09-12-2002 11:49 PM       View Profile for LyricFetish   Email LyricFetish   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LyricFetish

Absolutely-freaking-brilliant! This is definately my style of poem. So here are your alms, for a job well done. Peace out!

*~Meredith~*

"I can taste you on my lips
and smell you in my clothes"
*BHS

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Really weird, Carly.
But I like it.
I've always thought your writing was so unique. I don't pretend to grasp and analize it, but it grabs my attention.

Jenn

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