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impossible feelings

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Godsend_1
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0 posted 08-30-2002 12:00 PM       View Profile for Godsend_1   Email Godsend_1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Godsend_1


discomfort
cann't describe it
simply pain that doesn't hurt
icey defeat
life isnt the same
where am i going
lost and confused
pain that hurts to much to be pain
it must be something more
though i have no recognition
of this pain i have always never felt before
alone and disillusioned
life is all over the place
and i have yet to move
stuck in the same place
since the dawning of time
spilling my soul
out for you to read
slow roasting since my first cognitive thought
and this is what
i am reduced to

© Copyright 2002 Ben Redshaw - All Rights Reserved
knightlyshadows
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1 posted 08-30-2002 12:29 PM       View Profile for knightlyshadows   Email knightlyshadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for knightlyshadows

wow ben, this was -so- strong. youre writing has grown since i last read from you. and i like it alot. think you did very well on this. sometimes.. i feel the same way. keep writing.

A single choice can build destinies, or destroy them.

Getting away, isn't Running away.

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Savage Quiescence
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2 posted 08-30-2002 09:13 PM       View Profile for Savage Quiescence   Email Savage Quiescence   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Savage Quiescence

And so the Great Ben Redshaw returns. *Bows* Now if you would only learn to email people... *cough*

Anywho, super huggles! Good write here buddy boy, I agree with Tiff, your writing is really improving over time and it's super spiffy. Keep in touch this time, kays?

Lots of Luvvles
Ali

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never_a_princess
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3 posted 08-31-2002 12:31 AM       View Profile for never_a_princess   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for never_a_princess

Well, that's odd. Bennerz, posting? :P I liiike it. It's short, but to the point. Although, it's very illusioned in that I could say I feel the same way sometimes, but I don't necessarily understand all the different paths you want this poem to take. It's really well written, buddy. I especially liked:
"though i have no recognition
of this pain i have always never felt before"
(mostly because of the way you used "always never," and I quite enjoyed that)
-as well as-
"and this is what
i am reduced to"
(very lovely ending, nice way to draw it all together and bring your mind to a close, halting thoughts)
Luv ya *hugz*
__o0o_AnnA_o0o__

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Stumbling blox can b stepping stones if u allow them 2 b.

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4 posted 08-31-2002 12:41 AM       View Profile for Midnitesun   Email Midnitesun   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Midnitesun

life is all over the place
and i have yet to move
'stuck in the same place
since the dawning of time
spilling my soul
out for you to read
slow roasting since my first cognitive thought
and this is what
i am reduced to'

We should all be so reduced....
I enjoyed this much.

punkrockerrobin
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5 posted 08-31-2002 02:13 AM       View Profile for punkrockerrobin   Email punkrockerrobin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit punkrockerrobin's Home Page   View IP for punkrockerrobin

wow benny boy i loved it!! it was really awesome!! email me sometime

you either like me for who i am or you don't like me at all

Jenn Cirrincione
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6 posted 08-31-2002 03:47 PM       View Profile for Jenn Cirrincione   Email Jenn Cirrincione   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jenn Cirrincione

Not bad, truely. This felt scattered all over the place, and contradicted itself- but in a good kind of way. Nice.

Jenn

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i miss you.
 
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