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All hope on you
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All hope on you |
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Bob G New Member
since 2002-08-27
Posts 3 |
All seems hopeless my life is in shambles living seems useless life is a gamble but nothing else matter when I'm in your grace when I hear your chatter or see your face But reality comes back I see the truth again What is it that I lack To make our love begin My family fell apart on that fatefull night But I knew in my heart seeing you, I'd be alright Then my plans, my hopes and my dreams were shattered glass whats to live for all hope was lost as it would seem But then i looked up and there you were So now all hope is pinned on you I'm at the end of my rope What can I do? [This message has been edited by Bob G (08-27-2002 05:03 PM).] |
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Marshalzu  
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Welcome to Passions, I hope you enjoy your stay here  , thank you for sharing your poetry with us here, I really enjoyed the read and hope to read more of your work in the future.Andrew Mister Zu: A self confessed cannibal |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Welcome to the blue pages, Bob.  This was a pretty touching poem, even though it was written from a very personal perspective...To find hope within the crashing of your world is something extroardinary. I'm glad you have, and I hope you can keep it. ~Carly "My own eyes are not enough for me; I will see through a thousand and yet remain myself..." ~C.S. Lewis [This message has been edited by Child of the Stars (08-27-2002 09:02 PM).] |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
Welcome to Passions Bob! Check your email for a special message. But don't let one person make your happiness....make your own happiness and let them add to it. I really did like this poem though! Well done and I hope to see more.  ~Beth Howl at the stars, whisper when you're sleeping, I'll be there to hold you, I'll be there to stop the chills and all the weeping. |
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alex m Junior Member
since 2002-08-27
Posts 12 |
its good except the 3rd paragraph type thing "Then my plans, my hopes and my dreams were shattered glass whats to live for all hope was lost as it would seem But then i looked up and there you were" it doesnt really go right or something...i dunno maybe im wrong |
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Luther Junior Member
since 2002-08-15
Posts 17 |
Mate, no person is worth your tears, and when you find someone who is, then they should never make you cry. Life is a gamble, the stakes can be high...but when everything seems bad...just think..."it could be worse" A good read. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Welcome to Passions, Bob! Karilea |
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Riley
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain |
Welcome to passions Bob!!!!!! Luther: So true isn't it? Love that saying!!!!!!!! Anyhow, welcome. Ri <3 No guy is worth your tears, and when you find one that is, he won't make you cry <3 |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Welcome to Passions, Bob. This was a rather touching poem, however, it followed typical rhyme scheme, which is ok, but not great. You have great capabilities and I am looking forward to reading more from you. Good write! And welcome.... welcome welcome welcome! ich bin schwul, ich bin jüdisch und ein Kommunist dazu, Ich bin schwarz und behindert, doch genauso Mensch wie du ~Wizo |
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Bob G New Member
since 2002-08-27
Posts 3 |
Well actually i do not know too much about poem writing so im hoping to learn some different styles here |
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