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SunShine913
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0 posted 2002-08-26 05:54 AM



Hey you guys this is a very old poem for me and if you have read it be for it is probly because i wrote it under my other name Read_what_i_write....
Torn

Cnflicting emotions, crying pleas
Tears, they fall, but no one sees
broken hearts and broken promises
Mended wounds are torn apart.

Never-ending, struggles, bitter tears
Crys, the call, but no one hears
Shattered memeories and shattered dreams
Lifes not as easy as you thought it'd be

Twisted recollections, tattered words
A call for love that goes unheard
Shredded memeories and shattered dreams
Life's not as easy as you thought it'd be

Twisted recollections, tattered words
a call for love that goes unheard
Shredded confidence and shredded pride
thrown around on lifes wild ride

Ridiculed beliefs, bothered thoughts
A continuous battle remains unfought
Ruined today and ruined forever
As I struggle to put the peieces together

            *!~!* Andrea *!~!*
             soon to be mother    

© Copyright 2002 Andrea L. Figueroa - All Rights Reserved
Smiles and Cries
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1 posted 2002-08-26 03:03 PM


I liked it except that lines 3 and 4 didnt rhyme and all the other lines seemed to fit a rhyming pattern...but otherwise it was really good
Baby_Angel123
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2 posted 2002-08-26 04:55 PM


this was a really good poem keep up the good work

If you love something, let it go, if it comes back 2 u, its urs, if it doesnt, it never wuz. ~ DMX

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3 posted 2002-08-26 05:07 PM


Wow you sure have had a lot of nick changes but it's nice to read something by you again even though it is such a saddening topic. Anyway thank you for sharing it with us and I hope to see more of your work around soon

Andrew

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TradingSpaces19
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since 2002-08-31
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4 posted 2002-09-02 09:29 PM


Hey Andrea,

This poem is good too! Keep up the good work, and I can't wait to see pictures of the baby, I'm sure she'll be a cutie! Anyways keep writing and I will get some other poems up too. I have one in critical #2 or whatever, called "The First Time".

Andrea Kruckenberg

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