Teen Poetry #5 |
Torn |
SunShine913
since 2001-08-19
Posts 211Italy but from NC |
Hey you guys this is a very old poem for me and if you have read it be for it is probly because i wrote it under my other name Read_what_i_write.... Torn Cnflicting emotions, crying pleas Tears, they fall, but no one sees broken hearts and broken promises Mended wounds are torn apart. Never-ending, struggles, bitter tears Crys, the call, but no one hears Shattered memeories and shattered dreams Lifes not as easy as you thought it'd be Twisted recollections, tattered words A call for love that goes unheard Shredded memeories and shattered dreams Life's not as easy as you thought it'd be Twisted recollections, tattered words a call for love that goes unheard Shredded confidence and shredded pride thrown around on lifes wild ride Ridiculed beliefs, bothered thoughts A continuous battle remains unfought Ruined today and ruined forever As I struggle to put the peieces together *!~!* Andrea *!~!* |
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Smiles and Cries Junior Member
since 2002-08-23
Posts 16Newrk De |
I liked it except that lines 3 and 4 didnt rhyme and all the other lines seemed to fit a rhyming pattern...but otherwise it was really good |
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Baby_Angel123 Member
since 2001-10-12
Posts 63Unity, ME |
this was a really good poem keep up the good work If you love something, let it go, if it comes back 2 u, its urs, if it doesnt, it never wuz. ~ DMX |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Wow you sure have had a lot of nick changes but it's nice to read something by you again even though it is such a saddening topic. Anyway thank you for sharing it with us and I hope to see more of your work around soon Andrew Mister Zu: A self confessed cannibal |
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TradingSpaces19 Member
since 2002-08-31
Posts 134Arvada, Colorado |
Hey Andrea, This poem is good too! Keep up the good work, and I can't wait to see pictures of the baby, I'm sure she'll be a cutie! Anyways keep writing and I will get some other poems up too. I have one in critical #2 or whatever, called "The First Time". Andrea Kruckenberg |
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