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Chameleon
Member

since 2002-08-07

Posts 99
Australia

0 posted 2002-08-22 10:00 PM

Answer slowly, i don't want hear it.
I want to throw darts in between your eyes.
But not today.

Another excuse, an invitation to leave.
step outside, they are incoming.
Perhaps this way.

Its, its its its its incoming.

Tiger
Junior Member

since 2002-08-18

Posts 24
Queensland, Australia

1 posted 2002-08-23 04:16 AM

I reallllllly loved your first paragraph... ohh and the bit about the darts how cool! Although i do not understand the bit about it's it's it's it's etc????????
I saw that you are from Australia, where abouts? I am from Australia, Brisbane.

-Tiger

Otaku
Junior Member

since 2002-08-13

Posts 39
Western Australia

2 posted 2002-08-23 04:47 AM

i like your poem because i don't understand the last part....and it leaves me in a questioning mood....which is a good thing!

Australia, eh? me too........Perth, actually...

where are u from?

"Demon slain, the deed is done...."

knightlyshadows
Senior Member

since 2001-04-14

Posts 791
obscured vision

3 posted 2002-08-23 11:19 AM

i like your opening sentence alot, but my fav part of it all is the second stanza:

quote:
Another excuse, an invitation to leave.
step outside, they are incoming.
Perhaps this way.

and i also didnt understand the last bit of it. would you mind tellin us what it means? its really got me curious. i really liked the unique title as well. keep writing.
tiff

“A single choice can build destinies, or destroy them.”

"Words are windows to the heart."

[This message has been edited by knightlyshadows (08-23-2002 11:20 AM).]

branden726

Senior Member

since 2000-09-25

Posts 607
Bay City, MI

4 posted 2002-08-23 01:36 PM

Whats this about?

Chameleon
Member

since 2002-08-07

Posts 99
Australia

5 posted 2002-08-24 02:42 AM

I've been cornered so i'll explain.

" Its, its its its its incoming."

Its a verbal stutter. 'incoming' is the way I choose to describe the movement of the darts.

Whats it about?

It is an expression about my exhaustion of feeling intimidated.

hope that fields all questions...

[This message has been edited by Chameleon (08-24-2002 02:45 AM).]

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