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in the pouring rain

0 posted 2002-08-22 07:57 PM


lie upon a lacy cloud
floated off to the fantasy
you are running on air
laughing as i come closer

i reach out and take your hand
you eyes dance in the slowing moon
smiling i climb upon the sun
and stand on the tip by your side

if you leave i shall fall
you are my support now and then
i laugh as we jump
off to a shooting star of light

we go across the sky in a beam
as a silvery trace follows across
a burst of light blows through the dark
hidden into every corner they have shone

my eyes flicker and the light fades
your face desolves into black
i lie motionless in blank time
with only a vision of your face

To the world you maybe a person, but to a person you maybe the world

[This message has been edited by Riley (08-23-2002 06:46 PM).]

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1 posted 2002-08-22 08:22 PM


Hello, Riley! I think this is a good piece. The image painted itself in my head very vividly throughout the read. I really enjoy that in a poem! Good work.

~Sky

"Whatever life brings, I've been through everything, but now I'm on my knees again" -Creed

Riley
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in the pouring rain
2 posted 2002-08-22 08:49 PM


Thank you, I am going through one of those pre-teen ( I am almost a teen anyway )crises, and it is hurting really bad. I just can't explain what I feel so I try and put it on paper but I can't really. A guy, don't cha know it. Well thanks again.

Ri

To the world you maybe a person, but to a person you maybe the world

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