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Xaphan Junior Member
since 2002-05-29
Posts 22 |
Most of the stuff I post is extroverted. This however is introverted; directed at myself. Have you ever broken up with someone, met someone new, yet secretly, somewhere deep inside you, you wish your new person could be your old? I thought of this one day when I was with my boyfriend Ryan over at my best friend's house. I started spacing out, daydreaming, and Ryan asked me a question and I answered, "Yes, Simon." I guess somewhere secretly I have never forgotten Simon. I'm just being myself I'm just being me Nobody but me I'm just being myself Don't try to make me somebody else I've got to be myself I get the feeling You're holding on to memories you can't erase Now don't try to use me To replace the dreams that have left their trace Now what I'm saying May not be what you really want me to say And what you're hearing May not be what you really want to hear Look at me as a new beginning I won't be a part of an old ending No, not me I'm just being. Being myself. Don't try to change me To the image of your used-to-be Don't look for money Because somebody else I'll never be You don't want to hear it But I'm gonna say it -- I refuse to camoflage myself Because you need me to be somebody else No, not me Because I'm just being. Being myself. Don't try to make me somebody else. I've got to be myself. [This message has been edited by Xaphan (08-22-2002 05:21 PM).] |
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Savage Quiescence Member
since 2002-07-29
Posts 326Wandering |
Hmm, I like how it sounds as if you are trying to convince yourself in this. That makes it interesting, reinforcing the presence of an internal conflict. Keep Writin'! ~Sky "Whatever life brings, I've been through everything, but now I'm on my knees again" -Creed |
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branden726 
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
Hey can I be honest... Try writting about something else. Yourself is the hardest topic out there because you know everything about yourself but you dont wanna put it into words the wrong way. Think think think. I particularly didnt like this piece but am really up to reading something else you write plz dont take this the wrong way. You have great format and some parts were just better then others then when you put them together... you get a bad piece. If you put a lot of time into im sorry. If you havent put alot more into it to make it "stronger" thanks for taking my critism i cant spell :-p and if u ever feel the same way about me what the heck let me know. |
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Xaphan Junior Member
since 2002-05-29
Posts 22 |
I think you're misunderstanding my post. It's understandable, as this piece is rather enigmatic. It's not about "myself," per se, it's more along the lines of self-condemnation. My intro talks about how I accidently said my ex's name in front of my current lover and that I apparently still have feelings for my ex. This post, the "I'm just being myself..." is what, in my mind, I envision my current lover saying if he knew the way I feel about my ex. The secret that I really wish my "current" could be my ex, and he can't, because he's a different person. Make sense? |
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