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branden726
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0 posted 2002-08-22 05:12 PM


Your running away from me,
Your running away from everything,
You've made it so clear that im the one,
You still tell me you love me,
Even though you act like you hate me,
You blame me for being controlling and inconsiderate,
I try to change my ways once I realize,
Now its too late,
Now your the one that treats me like dirt,
Now your the one that makes me hurt,
What am I to do now?
You pushing me into a pool of water,
Watching me drown,
We have been together way to long,
Every bad thing you do to me... and i still hang on,
I realized it was me at first,
If it was to late ill never know,
You run from me and you run from "us"
Your friends a much better escape then to face the truth,
Im sorry I love you and Im sorry I must say,
Today is our day to find new "Friends"
I want you to know that I will always love you,
No matter who else you love, Ill always remember.

Who remembers me? Probably no one but what the heck I came back with my problems and I hope u guys can help me.

© Copyright 2002 Branden Jacobs - All Rights Reserved
Jester
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1 posted 2002-08-22 07:26 PM


I liked the structure of this.  I thought it went very well with the mood of the poem.  And it made me sad and also angry... thats a good thing because i was dragged right into the emotions of your writing.

I am your God, will you kill me now or shall I be continually suicidal?

Tamma
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2 posted 2002-08-23 11:35 AM


I remember you!! Welcome back! I just went thru this (almost) exact situation...The guy I was dating (for 8 months), started distancing himself from me around our 7 month anniversary, and when he finally ended it...it was horrible...


I've been away for awhile too, but then when he broke up with me (and Justin Michael came back into my life)...my poetry came back, too..

I've missed ya...email me so we can catch up

~ Tamma

Have you ever heard that "No shirt, No shoes" rule? My question is...Why doesn't that rule include pants?

branden726
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3 posted 2002-08-23 01:10 PM


Well right now im going through a tough time I was just told by my gf lastnight that ever since me and  her have been "fighting" she has had feelings for another :'( so i dont know what to do. Try to work it out... Or what she says there not serious feelings but she says she has those because its the way I used to treat her. I just dont know anymore.
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4 posted 2002-08-23 02:16 PM


Hey I remember you Looks like things are going pretty ruff. But hey we all get in our littls slumps, and it usually revolves around the oppostie sex. And you'll hve that.  I really liked the structure of this, also.  It flowed very nicely. Gret piece Brandon

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5 posted 2002-08-23 03:07 PM


Awww.... Definelty try and work it out. I'm sure whatever happens will be for the best. Good luck and thanks for the reply to my poem!
Love:
~*~Brittney~*~

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