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Riley
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in the pouring rain

0 posted 2002-08-16 10:26 PM


I know I haven't been here in a while, so I am back! This is one of my most recent! Enjoy!

watch me as i go
laughing so easily
what you cannot see
will not hurt you for now


deep into time
you will find out
my solitude of secret
the tears wasted in black


ever lasting smiles
hung up with a nail
tacked into the endless time
for now they will stay


crying wet pain
late into the night
shuddering scared
silvery kiss


wishing starlite nights
that normal would return
that everlasting comes
some far enough to hold

Better check that I'm about to upset and I'm glad now so you better step back I'm taking over so watch me shine-Joanna Pacitti/Watch Me Shine

© Copyright 2002 Riley Grant - All Rights Reserved
knightlyshadows
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since 2001-04-14
Posts 791
obscured vision
1 posted 2002-08-17 02:21 PM


loved the imagery in this. it flowed pretty well and i liked the wording. I especially liked these two stanzas:
quote:
deep into time
you will find out
my solitude of secret
the tears wasted in black


ever lasting smiles
hung up with a nail
tacked into the endless time
for now they will stay


good luck and keep writing.
tiff

“A single choice can build destinies, or destroy them.”

"Words are windows to the heart."

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