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anawnda
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0 posted 08-16-2002 03:00 AM       View Profile for anawnda   Email anawnda   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for anawnda

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           "Vase of flowers, in watercolor"

          I am the vase of flowers
          on the canvas you leave unfinished.
          you do not dare complete this scene-
          paint a table with me
          as the centerpiece, a lamp
          for light, glasses for sight,
          a mirror to reflect
          what you see in me.
          No, I exist alone
          in your memory.

          I am the vase of flowers you leave,
          the canvas you leave unfinished.
          your brush could stain my leaves
          with color,
          define the curves of these petals,
          shape this vase you have placed me in.
        
          Until now, I do not know
          what kind of flower I am to you-
          just one without thorns.
          I am the vase of flowers,
          the vase of flowers you leave unfinished.

          If I asked, would you tell me
          why you cannot picture a room for me
          to live and breathe in?
          or make me bloom as vividly
          as real flowers in your real garden?
          I am the vase you leave,
          the flowers you leave,
          the canvas unfinished.

          you have painted me in watercolor,
          in the blurs and strokes of dreams,
          then left me lonely on this canvas.
          Are you waiting for me to wilt?
          Do you still want me to break?
          Will you water or wash me off with tears?
            
                    ***********

for christian vasquez

        
© Copyright 2002 anawnda - All Rights Reserved
Otaku
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1 posted 08-16-2002 06:21 AM       View Profile for Otaku   Email Otaku   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Otaku

i like the sense of neglect in this poem, and the extended sentences procure frustration....

well thought out......an overall good job!

"Demon slain, the deed is done...."

Marge Tindal
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2 posted 08-16-2002 12:00 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Anawnda~
This is just lovely~
Your title captured me ...
I found the 'bouquet' word-fragrant with imagery~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Sunshine
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Vasquez is proud...
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4 posted 08-17-2002 12:53 AM       View Profile for Skyfire   Email Skyfire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfire

I like it I felt it was a little hard to follow the first time through, but the second time it flowed much easier for me (which doesn't say much for my comprehension, does it?).
Nazera29
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5 posted 08-17-2002 12:54 AM       View Profile for Nazera29   Email Nazera29   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nazera29

i love new metaphors and i think comparing yourself to a painting is brilliant! great job... and it reminds me of all the unfinished artwork i have left behind....

*We are the hero in our own story*

anawnda
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6 posted 08-21-2002 02:58 AM       View Profile for anawnda   Email anawnda   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for anawnda

actually this poem is connected with my previous one titled 'christian' its for this guy who at first liked me then just suddenly stopped calling and sending sms, i miss him and it still hurts a lot. also the poem 'thursday' and 'you won' is for christian vasquez also. God love sure sucks
pam
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7 posted 09-17-2002 01:24 AM       View Profile for pam   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for pam

hi anawnda! nice one!

hmmmm... is christian vasquez the guy from the "suportahan ta ka" pldt guy?
anawnda
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8 posted 09-29-2002 07:54 AM       View Profile for anawnda   Email anawnda   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for anawnda

yup he is that guy. i know him, we go out. i didnt know any1 knows him here, it sure sucks because he mislead me. were just friends now and we go out still but i try to guard my feelings now, i like this other guy now, its been months since i last visited this site.
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9 posted 12-05-2002 09:46 PM       View Profile for Local Parasite   Email Local Parasite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Local Parasite's Home Page   View IP for Local Parasite

Just coming back to add this to my library.  Don't mind me.  

Brian James
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10 posted 10-28-2006 09:48 PM       View Profile for Brian James   Email Brian James   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Brian James

This is a really, really good poem.  The relatively colloquial diction is a powerful compliment to such subtly profound sentiments as "No, I exist alone / in your memory."  I also think "in the blurs and strokes of dreams" is one of my favourite lines of piptalk poetry ever.

Yeesh, I don't know if you'll ever even read this reply, but all the same I have to keepsake this poem in my private library.

"To me, the thing that art does for life is to clean it, to strip it to form."
~Robert Frost

Brian James
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11 posted 10-28-2006 09:48 PM       View Profile for Brian James   Email Brian James   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Brian James

click!
rhia_5779
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12 posted 11-17-2006 11:10 AM       View Profile for rhia_5779   Email rhia_5779   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for rhia_5779

I loved the imagery. You probaly will never read this but thats ok. I post in Teen now.

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