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0 posted 2002-08-15 12:53 PM


A killing desire,
suicide for hire.
A love beyond sense.

No one understands.
No one understands.

Sacrificing oneself,
mutilation key;
blood seeking souls.

No one understands.
No one understands.

Two beams, one sword,
a multitude of thorns.
A killing desire.

No one understands.
No one understands.

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1 posted 2002-08-15 12:54 PM


I know I'm not around here much anymore; thought I'd drop by, say hello, and throw a dark into the ring.

Sincerely,
Titus

"I'll prepare myself, and one day my time will come."
            -Abraham Lincoln

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2 posted 2002-08-15 01:44 AM


ummm ti hun i think this is to dark for here i dunno we'll see

you either like me for who i am or you don't like me at all

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3 posted 2002-08-15 11:23 AM


Titus! Welcome back! This was dark indeed...gave me those strange chilly feelings. I still enjoyed it though.. I hope to see you around here some more. Maybe? Please? Pretty-please? I'll give you candy...

  ~Carly

"Feelings are not supposed to be logical. Dangerous is the man who has rationalized his emotions."
  ~David Borenstein


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4 posted 2002-08-15 03:45 PM


Hey Carly. Candy?

Just a note for everyone who reads this: to avoid confusion about my meaning, read this piece with a religious/Christian slant. It might make more sense when one reads it that way.

Sincerely,
Titus

"I'll prepare myself, and one day my time will come."
            -Abraham Lincoln

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5 posted 2002-08-15 04:37 PM


Yep....sort of what I thought considering this verse:

"Two beams, one sword,
a multitude of thorns.
A killing desire."

(and I DO like this) It would also make an interesting discussion thread, methinks.

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6 posted 2002-08-16 12:36 PM


Oh this is fantastic.
Strong all the way through and it can be interpreted on so many levels. It's nice to see a different view on religion.

Very much enjoyed. Thanks for the read.

~M

Imagination=nostalgia for the past, the absent; it is the liquid solution in which art develops the snapshots of reality.

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7 posted 2002-08-16 06:52 AM


This is a powerful piece Titus ... hard hitting from the metaphor you've used here. There is much to ponder from the religeous vantage you've explored within this poem.  Well done.

Best wishes,
/Kit

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8 posted 2002-08-16 07:55 AM


i like dark poems....your poem, here, is something i would have liked to have written..

Great job!

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9 posted 2002-08-16 02:21 PM


"A killing desire,
suicide for hire.
A love beyond sense."

As a Christian, I believe in Jesus Christ, and believe He had a killing desire, one to sacrifice himself for all, though, not all choose to acknowledge it. A "love beyond sense."

"No one understands.
No one understands."

Here, I am saying so many don't understand the Christian faith.

"Sacrificing oneself,
mutilation key;
blood seeking souls."

During the crucifixion, He was mutilated, and beaten beyond sense - thus, the first two lines. The third, yes, quite dark is in reference to, as a Christian, I believe all souls need the death/blood of Christ for salvation.

"No one understands.
No one understands."

"Two beams, one sword,
a multitude of thorns.
A killing desire."

Two beams = the Cross. One sword = the soldier's who made sure He died before His burial/ressurection. The thorns, His crown of thorns.

Hope that helps...

Sincerely,
Titus

"I'll prepare myself, and one day my time will come."
            -Abraham Lincoln

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10 posted 2002-08-16 04:30 PM


I didn't take it as a Christian kind of poem, but I see where it comes from now. Very interesting.

"you don't need one of these to let me inside of you" T.A.

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11 posted 2002-08-17 02:50 AM


What a fantastic examply of an extremely well done dark poem and you couldn't have picked better subject matter.  Enjoyed this.

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