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Cinderelly
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0 posted 2002-08-04 09:04 PM


The sun on your back,
the wind in your hair,
driving through the country
without a care.

© Copyright 2002 Jamie - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-08-04 11:44 PM


Awwwww.....keep going with this.....take us on that drive....short but sweet...


Lauren~

The ocean looks like a thousand diamonds strewn across a blue blanket
I lean against the wind pretend I am weightless and in this moment I am happy

Master
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since 1999-08-18
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2 posted 2002-08-05 02:48 PM


I disagree with Lauren... you've taken us far enough, imagination will take us from here. I liked the poem, it was elegant in its simplicity. Thanks
anya
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since 2002-07-27
Posts 393
London, UK
3 posted 2002-08-05 05:51 PM


I agree with Master, that was really good and I think that less can sometimes definetly be more
anya

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