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Allysa
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In an upside-down garden

0 posted 2002-08-04 01:18 PM



Obsessive Compulsive
                                                    
Roll over and notice                            
that I should have left
ten minutes ago
and that there’s no way in hell
that I’m going to make it on time.
Run out of my house
without shoes                          
and turn around to grab some,
reaching also for some cash,
my purse and a key to the house.
Count the cracks in sidewalk
but my rhythm’s screwed up this time
in a hurry to reach
this destination
rhythmic feet disturbed
don’t step on the cracks
don’t step on the cracks
one,
two,
three,
four,
five.......
three hundred and seven
three ‘o eight,
three ‘o nine,
three ten....
don’t step on the cracks
don’t step on the cracks
almost there
four streets to go
rhythmically moving
at a faster pace than normal
I usually arrive everywhere
earlier than everyone else
and adjust to the silence of the empty hallways
before they are disrupted with the loudness of teenage voices
bragging about their athletic capabilities
and how much weed they smoke in their off season.
Hurry
hurry, hurry, hurry
five minutes
six minutes
seven minutes late
one street away
six hundred and twelve
six hundred and thirteen
six hundred and fourteen....
don’t step on the cracks
don’t step on the cracks
don’t step on the cracks.

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Ina
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1 posted 2002-08-04 04:11 PM


I liked this i liked the "don't step on the cracks" it was a very well written poem. nice to read again.

Regina

LCBS
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2 posted 2002-08-04 05:32 PM


My mother always tells me that its good to have a little OCD, but when it starts interfering with your happiness it has gone to far...

Just a little quote for you...

Great poem!

~lisa

Allysa
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In an upside-down garden
3 posted 2002-08-05 01:37 PM


I wrote this on my way to summer gym one day because I was supposed to be there at eight thirty and I left at eight twenty-eight and it takes ten minutes to get to my school and I was flipping out and I have OCD... in other forms also.. but anyway.
Thanks everyone for replying.

I've never seen you on the streets of this town, I've never seen you just hanging around, But you still tell me that you know me... ~Justin Sane

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4 posted 2002-08-16 11:36 AM


I don't think I've ever felt so much anxiety within one poem. This is so great...thanks for posting it, Allysa.

  ~Carly

"Feelings are not supposed to be logical. Dangerous is the man who has rationalized his emotions."
  ~David Borenstein

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5 posted 2002-08-17 12:40 PM


I love your description about it; maybe it'll cause more people to understand it a little better.
paper doll
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6 posted 2002-08-17 05:07 AM


Wow, this is very intense. OC behaviour is a pain in the ass so I know where you're coming from here. You've really gone into a decent depth with this and got your message across clearly.

Well done and thanks for posting.

~M

Imagination=nostalgia for the past, the absent; it is the liquid solution in which art develops the snapshots of reality.

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