Oh hm... this is one poem that I must say struck me as very professional. You obviously have refined your skill and value high-quality poetry, because this is all the work of a true tradesman.
I loved the images this poem provoked... especially the way you counted up to three when describing gunshots... the different dark sentiments (this poem is pitch dark... I really respect a poem that can be truly dark without merely using a ton of buzz words).
"Unquiet grave" made me think of Faith and the Muse. I don't know if you meant to make that reference, might just be a coincidence.
Well, welcome to Passions in Poetry. Have fun sharing with us, I hope to see you reading and offering insight... Teen Poetry is in need of some more members, and I'd love to see your talent in the bunch.