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Teen Poetry #5

only time will tell

anya
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since 2002-07-27

Posts 393
London, UK

0 posted 2002-08-01 06:35 AM

Why does time do this?
keeps us forever guessing how it will effect us,
will it let us bloom into something beautiful
or will it make us wilt and ebb away?
and so it goes that only time will tell,
but when will it tell me?
go on,whisper it in my ear
cause I really need to know
how the following days,weeks,years
will effect the mix of me and him
but time and time again,
time keeps it's secrets
and laughs at impatient minds like mine

Kevin

Senior Member

since 1999-11-02

Posts 729
Torrington, Ct, Usa

1 posted 2002-08-01 09:22 AM

I like your poetry alot anya, the way you approach things is very unique

this is clever in its own right

Just a small grammar thing I would change keeps to keep to make it fit with the first part of the line

good job here

anya
Member

since 2002-07-27

Posts 393
London, UK

2 posted 2002-08-01 05:09 PM

thankyou for your kind comment, i'm glad that you liked it

anawnda
Member

since 2002-07-26

Posts 113

3 posted 2002-08-09 04:19 AM

this id reelly nice, hope to read more of your work, great job!@!!

paper doll
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since 2002-08-04

Posts 133
Floating on Uncertainty

4 posted 2002-08-10 12:06 PM

Time and relationships never go hand in hand. You're always running against the stream of one or the other. The usage of time and secrets tied in well together.

Thanks for the read.

~M

Imagination=nostalgia for the past, the absent; it is the liquid solution in which art develops the snapshots of reality.

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