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Tomer
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since 2002-06-28
Posts 1168
Michigan

0 posted 2002-07-29 02:58 AM



Kinky flava spilling onto a room,
As Feathers of cradled touch,
Blair through pores of even touch.

Sheets of stylized silk
Crinkled with obscure sweat,
As bodies of endearment cradle to an even crown.

Orgasms surround the room,
There’s nowhere to go,
But the deep filled moan

Shackled betrayal blindly forgotten,
As bodies are fought for,
With an envious love

Bedposts ring with a singing tune,
As pupils widen with contagious jazz.
A newly discovered language with an accent of tranquility.

Sweat roughs the muzzled faces,
While shadows paint a picture of love on the wall,
Only to be abruptly soured.

Ring, Ring…..
That was my wife, I must go,
Until tomorrow, I shall confess my love




[This message has been edited by Tomer (07-29-2002 03:06 AM).]

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Kevin
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1 posted 2002-07-30 04:13 PM


Hey tomer,

I loved the everything in this poem but the first stanza, I just had no clue what you were talking about

after that though, this was great
the ending is a perfect punchline
I enjoyed this alot
That jazz line is great
kev

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