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Miner boy
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since 2002-07-28
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0 posted 2002-07-28 03:59 AM


I just wrote this tonite, my first poem since 3rd grade.  I leave for college August 24th.

Confusing World

Why do people tell people who feel depressed about personal problems to think about people who are dying of cancer or A.I.D.S. and be thankful?
All of the sudden we have to be terminally ill in order to feel undesired feelings?  
Who are these assholes to tell us to feel more cheerful?  
I hate those one dimensional simple type indiviuals who run their mouths about feelings that have not once penetrated into their cement-like mitochondria.  
Few will get this next one, but I'll say it anyway.  
I've named these type people "norads", and hopefully some of my summer friends will catch that one.  
To add to the earlier trash talking on morons, your not the only group on my "despisal list".  
I can't say "hate list" these days, cause it'll put me in jail, so imma say "despisal list" to keep me from getting locked up.
This place isn't split up into just those that "Get it" and those that "Dont".  
There's also a group of those who are at the present time "in limbo".  
I said limbo to make me sound more intelligent by the way.  
I actually loathe these folk [edited] even more than the one celled group.  
I'll take it a step further and call these people "those of the silent majority who felt a little uneasy".  
These people actually had the chance to join the party, but they chose to play it safe.  They deserve limbo.  
As for myself, ask anyone I know, and they'll tell you. I'm gettin some pretty big calluses from digging, but sadly, I didn't pick mechanical engineering as my major.

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (07-29-2002 09:19 AM).]

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anya
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since 2002-07-27
Posts 393
London, UK
1 posted 2002-07-28 05:07 AM


powerful stuff, i actually agree with some of what you are saying, our own problems are no less real because people out there have bigger ones, if that is what you meant at all.
anya

Chel2082
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since 2002-07-23
Posts 40
Baltimore, MD
2 posted 2002-07-28 03:46 PM


Very interesting....makes me think of how i try to handle situations...or think about what i say before i open my mouth..that sometimes i have a hard time forgiving...well keep up the good work...i hope to read more.

<3 Chel

With GOD all things are possible...<3 CHEL

Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
3 posted 2002-07-29 09:24 AM



Hello Brock.  Your first post in Passions is a good, harsh write, a "venting" if you will, but I did want to let you know that I edited one offensive word that was caught by our filter.  Please take a moment to review our guidelines, and I will look forward to seeing more poems from you.

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.


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