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Jenabou
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Oklahoma/Nova Scotia Canada/USA

0 posted 2002-07-24 12:24 PM



The moonlight,
dances along the water.
I walk in circles,
hypnotized
lost in a transe
from the spell it has me under.
I lose my footing

S P L A S H

Im sinking,
slowly.
The moonlight,
dances above me.
I struggle,
reach,
but can't get to the surface.
I inhale,
water fills my lungs
Im drowning...
...in your love

*for someone who's used to heartache,losing it all was just a matter of time*
Be kind,for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle

© Copyright 2002 Jenna-Nicole Boutilier - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-07-24 12:48 PM


Wow!!! This is so...ominously cute!!! At first, I wasn't sure WHAT it was about---then...well, WOW! I loved this! Heh-heh-heh...it's been a while since I've read something so simple, yet complex in the same notion.

Again, this was very well done! *snaps fingers* Great job, now keep it up! Lol

Heheh...and I'm glad you've found a love that you could uh---drown in! Lol You know what I mean! Jenabou---I salute you!!!

Others are too in love with the sound of their own voice to speak the truth...

StellarChica
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since 2002-07-06
Posts 207
floating down a river...
2 posted 2002-07-24 01:51 PM


I really liked this poem! It was really good! Keep up the good work!

*~erin~*

"Then again, you're always first when no one's on your side."-incubus

Chel2082
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since 2002-07-23
Posts 40
Baltimore, MD
3 posted 2002-07-24 02:48 PM


This was a very interesting piece especially the ending...Good job, keep it up.

<3 Chel

With GOD all things are possible...<3 CHEL

Riley
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in the pouring rain
4 posted 2002-07-24 04:22 PM


I really liked this poem. It was different but I liked it.


~*Riley*~

Deep into that darkness peering, long I stood there wondering, fearing, doubting, dreaming dreams no mortal ever dared to dream before.
-- Edgar Alla

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