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Riley
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in the pouring rain

0 posted 2002-07-23 05:41 PM



sun rays wash
upon my face
crystal skies
open the heavens

velvet grass
emerald green
rubs so softly
against my cheek

wide open fields
dotted with plants
flowers surrond me
sweet smells flood my soul

close my eyes
breathe in the peace
precious moments
go on forever

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1 posted 2002-07-24 12:22 PM


I love your imaginary that you use in the poem. Good job.

Ronil (A mask for everyday. Imagine a life without them.)

Riley
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2 posted 2002-07-24 08:53 AM


Thank you very much!!!!

~*Riley*~

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3 posted 2002-07-24 02:50 PM


Very cute piece..nice use of imagery.  Keep it up.

<3 Chel

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Riley
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4 posted 2002-07-24 04:26 PM


thank you very much chel!!!!!


~*Riley*~

Deep into that darkness peering, long I stood there wondering, fearing, doubting, dreaming dreams no mortal ever dared to dream before.
-- Edgar Alla

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5 posted 2002-07-24 07:20 PM


Hey, great poem! Excellent use of imagery. Keep up the good work!

"From the start it was shaky and the characters rash, a nice setting for heartache where emotion comes last."-Yellowcard

[This message has been edited by StellarChica (07-24-2002 07:20 PM).]

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6 posted 2002-07-24 08:13 PM


Thank you for your comment stella!!!! Hope to read some of your stuff.


~*Riley*~

Deep into that darkness peering, long I stood there wondering, fearing, doubting, dreaming dreams no mortal ever dared to dream before-Edgar Allen Poe

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