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Teen Poetry #5

Just for Casey (clve527)

Master
Senior Member

since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

0 posted 2002-07-18 12:11 PM

Me doesn’t have no need for grammar,
mine sentences are fine as is!
I, being famous, do not plan on,--
I dream of having lips her kissed.

To have survived, for me, the evening,
the heart of her’s would be enough,
but now, alone, she, him, is leaving,
and one was left, alas, in love.

Check out my poetry here:

http://www.unknownpoets.com/db/authors/master

Kielo
Senior Member

since 2002-02-11

Posts 1109

1 posted 2002-07-18 01:27 AM

Wow... that was interesting. I think I understood it, but that grammar that may not matter to you made it hard for me to figure out. I had to read a few lines five or ten times. Maybe I'm just dumb.

It was entertaining though. Very much so.

clve527
Member

since 2002-07-08

Posts 200

2 posted 2002-07-18 09:16 AM

I would prefer my name not be associated with a piece like this.

Casey

Some editors are failed writers, but so are most writers.
- T. S. Eliot

LCBS
Senior Member

since 2001-11-29

Posts 532
Connecticut

3 posted 2002-07-18 10:35 AM

I read this on your website, and I thought of everything Casey would say about it...BWAHAHAHAHA.

Anyway, the poem was very good. Sometimes it is harder to write with bad grammar(purposely) then it is to write normally.

By the way, I love the title...

[This message has been edited by LCBS (07-18-2002 10:38 AM).]

quietlydying

Senior Member

since 2001-06-10

Posts 935
the wonderful land of oz

4 posted 2002-07-19 02:59 PM

interesting coming from one who advertises their poetry even more so than nike at a funeral.

you're both getting on my nerves.

/jen/

so foul and fair a day i have not seen. - macbeth act 1, scene 3

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