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A Grain
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A Grain |
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Riley_Grant New Member
since 2002-07-16
Posts 4 |
I look down At my feet Tiny grains Sand washes Of the beach The ocean takes Them Out to sea On a journey Never to come Back to the beach Their new home At the bottom The sea their friend Now Only once Have I Gotten the chance Run my feet Through the grains Before they are Gone Never see them Again now Gone forever |
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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
Wow... I think I've been away from pip too long. I've forgotten what good poetry is like, and all my replies start with "Wow." This really impressed me. Very deep. This could be considered an extended metaphor, or a beautiful poem without a second meaning. Mind if I ask which you intended? |
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Riley_Grant New Member
since 2002-07-16
Posts 4 |
To Kielo, I think I intended it to be the poem witout a second meaning. But I am trying to work on it. Thank you for your reply. Riley |
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