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Missthang
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since 2001-07-03
Posts 103


0 posted 2002-07-07 03:18 PM


I sense it aching; stop pounding on my heart.
At times my mind and body are miles and miles apart.
So fill up my cup the effect is belated.
Here comes that smile, i'm so intoxicated.

Absent-minded judgements and wounding thoughts.
So much fun insn't it, or is it not?
One more round the effect is belated.
Here comes that smile, i'm so intoxicated.

Tell a lie here, a tall-tale there.
I'm an ignorant lush devoid of care.
Pass me a bottle the effect is belated.
Here comes that smile, i'm so intoxicated.

"Whatever you are doing, love yourslef for doing it.
Whatever you are feeling, love yourself for feeling it."
       -Thaddeus Golas

© Copyright 2002 Adamma Bankhead - All Rights Reserved
Deep_Inside
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since 2002-02-14
Posts 377
i can't stop hiding
1 posted 2002-07-07 04:03 PM


that was a good poem. let me guess i think you might be drunk.  it's hard your right don't get taken advantage of
LCBS
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since 2001-11-29
Posts 532
Connecticut
2 posted 2002-07-07 06:31 PM


well I think its kind of....blatant...to say "your a drunk"

Every poem tells a story, maybe about you, maybe about someone you know...and this "bottle" this alcohol may represent something intoxicating you....

Anyway, I loved the poem....The repitition of the last two lines relaly worked for it
Great Job

StellarChica
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since 2002-07-06
Posts 207
floating down a river...
3 posted 2002-07-07 08:15 PM


wow, i really liked that poem. keep up the good work!

*~ERIN~*

[This message has been edited by StellarChica (07-07-2002 08:16 PM).]

Missthang
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since 2001-07-03
Posts 103

4 posted 2002-07-09 04:29 PM


ok, just to clarify...i'm not a drunk but this poem is about drinking. lately i have been drinking more than usual (but controlled) and i'm wondering why. is it because i'm trying to forget my stresses? is it becasue i want to escape my problems? or is it because i am just socially drinking? it's been bothering me and i can't figure it out, so i wrote this poem.


"Whatever you are doing, love yourslef for doing it.
Whatever you are feeling, love yourself for feeling it."
       -Thaddeus Golas

[This message has been edited by Missthang (07-09-2002 04:31 PM).]

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