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Tomer
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since 2002-06-28
Posts 1168
Michigan

0 posted 2002-07-04 03:54 AM



Blue waters start to deteriorate
Cries of change are begged for
Pounds of weight are echoed in a breeze of confusion
Translucent mirrors no longer bother
Frail fingers begin to shake tensely
Paleness invades an ignorant soul
A Waistline beginning to decrease with a thinning scowl
Chills dribble down legs of horror
Ordinary foods become poisonous to my decaying teeth
Worms of infectious disease slither in and out of weakening bones
Frequent visits to a man in white gives hope for cause
Turning the corner with fret, I am told to take off my shoes
A 5-foot machine stands with an authoritative stance
I am told to step on…
Breaths of anticipation whisper hopes for an increase in weight
Loose Change scattered throughout pockets of lies
74 pounds, a sigh of relief exhaled
68 was the previous number from a few weeks ago
Loose change becoming a stream of answers
14 years of age, standing at a measly 4 feet and 10 inches
A boy lost in his own web of games
A sweet tooth becomes the savior to my problems
Starvation throughout the day, leads to a box full of donuts
My family split in half, exchanging broken hearts
Confusion amongst myself as I ponder my actions
A glance into the mirror only solidifies what I already had expected
A ghost without a cause
A depression misplaced in a body of skinny measures






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Twilight Zone
1 posted 2002-07-06 01:12 PM


I'm just glad to see you're seeking help
that's a first step to recovery
and writing this piece shows me you know there's a problem
admitting it is another step
seems like you are headed the right direction
thanks for sharing

là où est mon amour?
donde está mi amour?
wo ist meine Liebe?
Nelly Furtado é a menina a mais bonita no mundo largo do todo.


mistic
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since 2001-05-06
Posts 233
Idaho, U.S.A.
2 posted 2002-07-08 12:51 PM


awesome imagery here... keep trying to seek help, it's best in the long run
sillywilly
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since 2002-06-25
Posts 33
oklahoma
3 posted 2002-07-08 05:47 PM


Great poem. Hardships in life tend to bring out either the best or worst of us and from this poem it seems your best is brought out. Never give up!
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