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Tomer
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since 2002-06-28
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Michigan

0 posted 2002-07-01 01:36 AM





Face descending into the grass
Tears engulf my face
Cries of forgiveness are forever lost
Clouds clutter my mind
Paralyzed with fret
Your body becomes lifeless
Dreams of happiness are now sorrow regret
Tick, Tock, Tick, Tock
Time at the end of its own sector
Realization becomes the key to a rusty door
Bury my soul
Redemption, nevermore


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sillywilly
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since 2002-06-25
Posts 33
oklahoma
1 posted 2002-07-01 10:08 AM


Its sounds like you are hurting. The poem is pretty deep. I think it is good though. Its good to express all emotions. I hope things go well for you.
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since 2001-05-15
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2 posted 2002-07-03 05:00 AM


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Lexy
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since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038
California
3 posted 2003-07-08 10:30 PM


my lord..you are good. Thats going in my library. This is amazing..
Lex...

sixington
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since 2003-07-14
Posts 53
Utah
4 posted 2003-07-14 01:53 PM


nice! soulful...
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