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MidnightSon
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between the gutter & the stars

0 posted 2002-06-06 06:25 AM


"consider the life of a teenager.
you have parents and teachers telling you what to do.
you have movies, magazines and TV telling you what to do.
but you KNOW what you have to do.
your job, your purpose is to be accepted, get a cute girlfriend, and figure out something to do with the rest of your life.
what if you're confused and can't think of a career?
what if you're funny looking and can't get a girlfriend?
but no one wants to hear it...
you see, the terrible secret is that being young is sometimes less fun
than being dead."
-"Pump up the Volume"

it's not the cigarettes at all...
it's the past, and i'm in withdrawl.
and if i promised the world
i wouldn't say anymore
would things go back to
what they were before?
if i closed my eyes,
would the world stop spinning?
would i keep on quitting?
could i quit sinning?
Three years wearin the same old clothes
Three years thinkin of last nights shows
and now my patience is wearin' thin
all these lives i been livin' in...
they're givin in,
and i can't win...
So i'm giving up my fight;
So i'm laying down the my sword.
Put on a suit and tie;
'cause these dreams are no reward.
With nothin left to say...
i was challenged, and i was bested.
A broken dreamer; a non-believer
i guess i'll settle for bein' accepted.

it's not that the future's far or near...
The future's just so grim.

"The soul is oftentimes a battlefield where reason and judgement wage war on passion and appetite."

[This message has been edited by MidnightSon (06-06-2002 06:26 AM).]

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Dark Enchantress
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1 posted 2002-06-06 05:13 PM


I really "dig" this. (I think slang is very funny - ignore my quotations.) It's really honest and upfront. It explores a side that can often be addressed, but you said it in a way that made it seem interesting and fresh. It's a nice break from the 'I love you, you're the only one for me' bull.

[Jaime]

"I think I would like to call myself 'the girl who wanted to be God'." Sylvia Plath

[This message has been edited by Dopey_Dope (06-06-2002 05:42 PM).]

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2 posted 2002-06-06 05:42 PM


Wow amazing.....really really really amazing. The slang, it didn't strike me as full fledged ebonics. I got more of a 40's gangster feel. Maybe I'm crazy, but regardless I really liked it. GREAT choice of words, and well expressed. I hope to see more of your work, truly.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

MidnightSon
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since 2002-05-15
Posts 312
between the gutter & the stars
3 posted 2002-06-06 09:41 PM


thanks to both of you...
i'd just watched "pump up the volume" and "gleaming the cube" (a christian slater night i guess) and these words came to mind.
it was just 5am dribble.
but i'm glad you dug it...
glad ya found it copasetic.

"The soul is oftentimes a battlefield where reason and judgement wage war on passion and appetite."

chasing rain
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since 2001-05-15
Posts 737
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4 posted 2002-06-07 10:11 PM


Wow. Really, an enjoyable read! I found that as the poem went on, the flow got better and more "settled", though I don't know if that's quite the word I was looking for. ^^; Anyways! Very truthful, and perceptive. Wish I could find something else to say...obviously, I'm at a loss for words right now. Must get back into the piptalk thing. *mental note* Thanks for the read! ^_^

-Leah

Hey, look! 1000! WOO! Feel special today. You're my 1000th post. ^^

[This message has been edited by chasing rain (06-07-2002 10:18 PM).]

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