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Kellie_Cantrell
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0 posted 2002-05-27 02:47 PM



Walking away is never easy
and Isn't something I want to do
leaving the past behind
keeping away from the dark cloud
of depression that hovers overhead
Bless th eone and only
For teaching me so well
Keeping me in the light so well
Thank Thee Thank Thee
I will never walk away from thee

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1 posted 2002-05-27 06:05 PM


Never walk away from the lighter side of things...once your pulled out of the depression i think its hard not to be tempted to let yourself wander back into it...good poem Thanks for sharing

iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf..

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2 posted 2002-05-30 08:01 AM


Let go of the bad and invite the good. I enjoyed the poem. Since you said to inform you on what I thought of the poem: I liked it a lot but the Elizabethan style comes out of nowhere. It kind of surprises you. Usually it sounds better if the whole thing is in that style or if the elizabethan is put in quotations for effect.

Anyhow.....that's just my opinion. The poem was well done, and the message was nicely put.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

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3 posted 2002-05-30 04:00 PM


Not bad. Great emotion in so few words. Nice.

Jenn

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4 posted 2002-06-06 10:15 AM


it's true, walking away on anything is never easy
but if it's for the best, do so
thanks for sharing

là où est mon amour?
donde está mi amour?
wo ist meine Liebe?
Nelly Furtado é a menina a mais bonita no mundo largo do todo.


Kellie_Cantrell
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5 posted 2003-07-13 04:12 AM


but holding on is worse
sixington
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6 posted 2003-07-14 01:52 PM


nice poem. very thoughtful, even in so few lines.
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