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Who iis she Junior Member
since 2002-05-14
Posts 41Some where over the rainbow |
A young woman was in line with the others that had yet to find a master, eyes of violet allowing their gaze to quickly scan the masters that surrounded her to determine if she was worth their time and their money. A hand lifted and slender fingers were run through light brown tresses, removing the few stray pieces from her face and eyes, before she tucked them safely beind an ear. She then waited in silence to be chosen by a new master. **I dont like this poem!** Τ׺·. .·º ËriÇ康. .·º×¤Î |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
hmm I dont know what I think about this just yet. Interestin format and I like how it tells a short lil story. Looks like it took too much effort to line up for me to ever do something like that. Good job. ~tiff “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I also liked that this tells a short story in it, but I guess to be honest I didn't like the structure a lot. Other's may love it though, keep them coming! "Be kind for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle" Plato. |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
strangely enough, the formatting was what i liked about this piece...this must have been hard to do and it helped me better appreciate this poem... just curious: why don't you like this piece? |
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Who iis she Junior Member
since 2002-05-14
Posts 41Some where over the rainbow |
I dont know why it is just So short and i lke poems that tell more of a story Τ׺·. .·º ËriÇ康. .·º×¤Î |
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