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vipersumo
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since 2002-05-17
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0 posted 2002-05-17 09:36 PM



Hey ya'll!!! this is my first post here so i dont really kno the ropes yet...but gimme a chance...thanks!!!
~vipersumo

Shadows

Shadows drop over the path
My path on the way home
Once filled with a confident light
Now left alone.
Darkness consumes the worn trail
Footsteps all alone
Trying to find the way
Away from the unknown.
I stand against my judgment
And continue to press on
But when I think I see the light
I get there and it is gone.


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Who iis she
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since 2002-05-14
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Some where over the rainbow
1 posted 2002-05-18 12:41 PM


Heyy Your poem is great!::High five:: I am new too! Well nice poem..Keep it up and welcome to pipTalks!

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Jenn Cirrincione
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2 posted 2002-05-18 01:26 AM


Great first post!!
I look forward to more from you.

Welcome to PIP.
Jenn

Ps. Check your email for a greeting

Why is it that we are at our most ingenius only when trying to destroy the things that keep us alive and thriving?

knightlyshadows
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since 2001-04-14
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obscured vision
3 posted 2002-05-18 03:05 AM


Love the message behind this. Good word usage and good flow. You wrote this well. Cant wait to read more from you.
Welcome to PIP.
~tiff

“A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.”

I know Im not perfect but I can smile
& I hope that you c this heart behind my tired eyes

Lakewalker
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On the streets w/ people
4 posted 2002-05-18 10:45 AM


Nice job, welcome, I hope you enjoy it here

"Be kind for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle" Plato.

kaile
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singapore
5 posted 2002-05-19 02:07 PM


the last two lines hit it for me..lights can be taunting, yup?

and welcome to passions

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