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to the one i love
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to the one i love |
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punkrockerrobin 
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV 
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hi people!!! bet you thought i disappeared huh? well i am back. and have some very special words for a very special person. to the one i love, you have my heart. i won't ask for it back. just treat it kindly. please don't hurt me. to the one i love. i love you back. more than you could imagine. you treat me like a queen and love me the same. to the one i love. you have me and my heart. and we will be with you always. this poem was for a very special person. he knows who he is. i love you hun! i am me don't tell me different!! |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Hey! Do I know who he is? I havent' talked to you in so long! I just have something to say about your formatting dear. What's with the use of periods every sentence?  I think it would flow more smoothly if you lost some of those periods and maybe stuck some semi-colons in there. Good write though!A concussion is bliss |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
while i'm not sure whether semi-colons would do the trick, i liked the sentiments in this musing..it's nice to let someone know you love him..good luck with the relationship! |
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