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Dunphy
Member

since 2002-03-14

Posts 82
Massachusetts USA

0 posted 2002-05-08 01:40 PM

life is a wunda
people think will it eva tak'em unda!
but i'm goin to a pretty place no where the flowers grown
i be back in a houer or so.
i got a lot in my sleave
it's difficult ta believe
someday i hope ta be free.
tha only one who knows iss god
he's tha one that gave me a hawt.
some times i wunda my my mutha gave me burth
some times i ask why i'm even awn earth.
but it's nawt my place ta ask
some times it's good ta laugh.
i'm frum tha E A S T nawt tha W E S T
i'm gonna that i'm tha best.

FROM DUNPHY
AKA KJ

[This message has been edited by Dunphy (05-08-2002 01:44 PM).]

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2002-05-08 05:57 PM

Kevin,
your poetry always flows,
and it really rocks.

I am starting to get used to your spelling now too

Nan

Administrator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

2 posted 2002-05-09 01:24 PM

LOL - Susan - He talks that way too...

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

3 posted 2002-05-09 03:06 PM

Nan,
I bet he is a blast!

Allysa

Senior Member

since 1999-11-09

Posts 1952
In an upside-down garden

4 posted 2002-05-10 09:52 AM

Great write.
It vaguely reminds me of something, but I don't know what...

Mon Cherie

Senior Member

since 2001-10-31

Posts 922
Land of Never-ending Summers

5 posted 2002-05-11 01:02 PM

Oh dear, I need some getting use to the spelling... I took quite a while reading the poem, but when I figured it out, it did sound great!

Allysa, it reminded me of something too! No offence to you, Dunphy, but the spelling looks like how Tweety's speech is written.

"I tawt i taw a puddy tat... I did! I did!"

_,,,^.^,,,_
Florence

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

6 posted 2002-06-06 12:15 PM

Enjoyed, the ebonics add effect. I guess we could consider this the new style of writing. Each epoch has its own style, and I'd have to say that this is most definitely a very prominent one. Well done.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

blakloks
Member

since 2002-06-01

Posts 60

7 posted 2002-06-06 10:07 AM

your language really adds characteristics to the writing - i think its cool!

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