What's Come Over Me? (please critique)

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Teen Poetry #5

What's Come Over Me? (please critique)

lauren03
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since 2002-01-04

Posts 64
oh, usa

0 posted 2002-05-05 10:23 PM

I don't know what's come over me
once again, here I am, asking myself if this could be true
I'm not sure what I'm doing here
Is this real? or will I feel another heart break?
So far you've shown me all I've wanted for so long
but could this be just another game
some days I'm ashamed, for your his friend
other days I'm ashamed to say I loved him
but every night as I go to bed I feel so right
no shame or hurt or quilt
just a funny little feeling that has begun to overtake me
could I possibly love you after all I've gone through
I think it might be true.......
all the days I cried
all the nights I wanted to die
only to find myself here with you
so can I believe in what's come over me?

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

1 posted 2002-05-06 01:42 PM

Sometimes i cant believe whats come over me either in certain situations...i guess we all doubt ourselfes. Everything happens for a reason..maybe its better not to wonder whats come over you bet just let what is happening to you happen. I enjoyed this a lot!! thanks for sharing this with us hun

iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf..

songsoftheaftermath
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since 2002-06-19

Posts 84
a world of disarray

2 posted 2002-06-27 01:58 AM

ahh..i can relate to this so well..i hope youve figured out your emotions by now...and that youre happy

thanks for posting

could the darkness be my friend?

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

3 posted 2002-07-06 01:16 PM

Just be happy you've found someone, and stop asking too many quetions. All that's gonna lead you to is confusion. Happy to see that you are happy again.

là où est mon amour?
donde está mi amour?
wo ist meine Liebe?
Nelly Furtado é a menina a mais bonita no mundo largo do todo.

Skyfire

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since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

4 posted 2002-07-07 12:46 PM

I can't say anything without repeating what the others have said, so other than saying thank you for the read, and good luck in your searching for answers, I must say that it is a good poem.

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