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Allysa
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In an upside-down garden

0 posted 2002-05-03 09:06 AM


You pass me in the hallway
climbing over my back
as I lean forward
slamming down my last card
to win the game.
You tap me on my head
and I lean back
pinning your legs to the wall
as you smile
and I'm lost again.

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1 posted 2002-05-05 09:35 PM


cool!..i'm interpreting "lost" in two ways...firstly, the author is lost in her friend's wonderful smile...secondly, the competitive author lost the game again...
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2 posted 2002-05-06 12:37 PM


i think she lost her heart as well... =)

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tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs
3 posted 2002-05-06 01:43 PM


I liked it a lot allysa!! short and sweet and to the point!! thanks for sharing

iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf..

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4 posted 2002-05-08 09:53 AM


hmmmmm very interesting
very though tprovoking poem Allysa
this is really good
I'll get back to you on this
thanks for sharing

là où est mon amour?
donde está mi amour?
wo ist meine Liebe?
Nelly Furtado é a menina a mais bonita no mundo largo do todo.


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5 posted 2002-05-08 12:47 PM


Hmmm... I really have mixed emotion on the final words. Lost is this feeling that just carries you away, and it's so great. And yet, it's so scary and you lose control of yourself. It's hard isn't it?

Nice write...
Jenn

"I can't get you out of my head- your love is all I think about."

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