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inspiredpoetwriter
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since 2002-01-05
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0 posted 2002-04-22 10:17 PM


Title: Turn out the lights
4-21-02

Turn out the lights
Let me be alone.

Turn out the lights
Time I don’t care to
Know let it go.

Turn out the lights
Leave the whispers
To take control.

Turn out the lights
Let me bleed to
Death let me go.

Turn out the lights
Tears they may drown
Me and send me
To the devil.

Turn out the lights
Sorrow, pain and strife
Take me whole.

Turn out the lights
I’m not afraid.

Turn out the lights
Make me disappear
From here I don’t
Want to be seen again.

Turn out the lights
Here’s my place to be
Place to hide.

Turn out the lights
Turn them out
Forever.

¥¤¥¤¥¥¤¥¤¥iM a PoEt WhO wRiTeZ Wit HeR Heart ¥¤¥¤¥¥¤¥¤¥

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Cinderelly
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since 2001-12-31
Posts 189
NM, USA
1 posted 2002-04-23 12:59 PM


I really like these lines:

Turn out the lights
Make me disappear
From here I don’t
Want to be seen again.

Great poem!

Life is a moderately good play w/ a badly written thrid act. - Unknown

dastard
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since 2001-07-14
Posts 55
in tearing silence
2 posted 2002-04-23 05:09 AM


uhh.. dark! ..but good!

the repetition and differing length of each stanza made a good climax towards the end: "forever"
I liked this a lot!

"Pain doesn't hurt when it's all you've ever felt" ~Marie, the girl of a thousand truths           

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3 posted 2002-04-24 10:39 PM




(big huggssssssss) I can feel such sadness and angst behind these words, sweet friend, I hope everything is OK and this kind of experience is now behind you! (sigh) I'm here if you ever need someone to talk to, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiufl heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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4 posted 2002-04-25 05:44 PM


so so sad
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5 posted 2002-04-26 12:22 PM


Very dark and full of raw emotion. I wish that sometimes i could turn the lights out forever...i try and it never works...::hugs:: Loved the poem

iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf..

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