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SlowDrag
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Tx...need i say more

0 posted 2002-04-15 06:21 PM


this song is a work of fiction....haha i did not get my heart broke...i dont even believe in dating....but it makes for a good acoustic song.


V1
I wasted my time
You’re wasting your time
With him
I should have tried more
Then you’d love me more
than him

I should have gone a little farther
Before he beat me to your heart.

V2
So much time I
Spent just loving
You
I never told you
Just what I thought
You knew

But now I can see you didn’t know.
But I can’t watch you love him so.

Bridge 1
There goes the girl
Of my dreams
Tell me it’s not what it seems
At night I wake up…
Feeling your touch
And I know…

V3
I said I love you
You didn’t under-
stand
You said “you’re crazy..
I’m in love
with him”

I said “ I need you…I’m so much better than him”
But you………just kissed me on the cheek and smiled.

Bridge 2:
I’ve heard that time heals all wounds
I’ve heard that love feels more than true.
Nothing’s quite as bad as it seems.
She may not be the girl of my dreams.

"Pardon me while I throw up, I guess some people never grow up..."

[This message has been edited by SlowDrag (04-16-2002 06:38 PM).]

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with you
1 posted 2002-04-15 11:09 PM


ok, the non title got me to laugh, then read, and I want you to know, I heard this, with my radio blasting some other music right now, it faded and I heard this song, and I love it. I am keeping this tucked away in my library, so I can re read it when it is a hit and I am listening to it on my radio!!!! Bravo....truly loved this song!!   btw a good name for the song could be "Not the girl"


[This message has been edited by SEA (04-15-2002 11:10 PM).]

knightlyshadows
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2 posted 2002-04-16 12:23 PM


Ok, I agree with Sea.. this was great. I loved it. Not sure about the title she suggest tho, thats a country song title by tim mcgraw I think. Sure it could be named that but Ill always think of tim's song.
This is going to my library. and If theres a way for you to record this as you sing and play it with your guitar, id LOVE to have it sent to me. If you could email me with anything about it Id be grateful. Thanks and GREAT write.
..tiff..

“A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.”

I know Im not perfect but I can smile
& I hope that you c this heart behind my tired eyes

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3 posted 2002-04-16 01:52 AM


that Tim song is Don't take the girl
knightlyshadows
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4 posted 2002-04-16 02:43 AM


shhh sea, i may be from Alabama, but that doesnt mean I know my country. don't tell tho.

“A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.”

I know Im not perfect but I can smile
& I hope that you c this heart behind my tired eyes

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5 posted 2002-04-16 01:07 PM


Bravo!
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6 posted 2002-04-16 01:35 PM


I liked it a lot!!! LOL @ the title

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SlowDrag
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Tx...need i say more
7 posted 2002-04-16 06:15 PM


ok thanks for the replies this time...haha
i have recorded this...it's a horrible first draft type thing...just me and my guitar....and my voice shortly after my band had practiced (so i din't have much a voice anyhow) so if anyone wants a copy sent email me a dr_pepsi13@yahoo.com and i'll be glad to send it to you through msn aim or yahoo or something of the sort....keep up teh replies...give me a title haha

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