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Dark Enchantress
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0 posted 2002-04-13 06:05 PM


Caught inside
they sound their frustration
buzzing and crawling
as if the cage might
yield to them or show
even some pity, but
apathy is the taste
on the glass, on the walls
and while they tumble
and rumble and roar
right below them is an
open door, but venture
they don't for fear that
they might lose their
image of the outside

4.13.02


"I never claimed to be your savior
I said I had a dirty mouth
Stop analyzing my behavior
If you’re too dumb to work it out"
Garbage

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1 posted 2002-04-13 06:56 PM


*grins*

I liked this in particular because it was compact, to the point, and yet still pertained depth.

I like how you describe people, caught in their own little worlds or opinions of things, so unwlling to sacrafice those opinions, they don't see how easily they could be free, free to be open and experience so many, many things. Wonderful.

~
Mon Verite


"Tesous Christos, Theou Uios, Soter"

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Dark Enchantress
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2 posted 2002-04-13 07:50 PM


Actually that wasn't exactly what I had in mind, but it works. You got the general idea. And really all that matters is that you got something out of it.   Thanks.

I had an SAT class this morning and the bees stuck inside the cafeteria reminded me of something... rather symbolic really. So I just wrote about the bees.


Think about it.

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3 posted 2002-04-14 01:42 AM


What did they remind you of, memina?

~
Mon Verite

Much ado abotu nothing....

Carpe Diem!

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4 posted 2002-04-14 11:09 PM


I liked this one a lot Good poem and thanks for sharing!

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