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Allysa
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In an upside-down garden

0 posted 2002-04-10 04:40 PM


The girl and her sister walked down the street
they had chosen to take a side road
instead of the main street they usually took.

They notcied two boys walking with skateboards
the younger one was scared and the older one
tried to lead her across the street.

The boys followed and caught up with the girls
One grabbed the young one and the other
grabbed the older girl and knocked her down.

They had the younger one hold her down
while they raped the older one
the younger one got away and ran to the main road.

When the two boys were finished
they walked away and murmured to her
"be ready for next time this happens."

She rose to her feet and stumbled
finding her way to the main road
where she collapsed.

They had raped her but not only had they done that,
they had stripped her of her pride
and battered her soul.

It's not right.



© Copyright 2002 Allysa - All Rights Reserved
Kielo
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1 posted 2002-04-10 05:31 PM


Wow... you've touched on some delicate material here... The last four lines were excellent. Wow...

Kielo

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2 posted 2002-04-10 06:24 PM


Wow. My God. Some people should be stoned.

Emotional piece here.

Jenn

"I can't get you out of my head- your love is all I think about."

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3 posted 2002-04-10 09:49 PM


I agree with Jenn

Some people are only alive, because its illegal to kill (and Immoral too...you know)

Anyway, great post..

~Lisa

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4 posted 2002-04-11 01:12 PM


You have touched a very taboo subject that the authorities don't like talking about but when it comes down to it what is there to talk about 'It's not right'
very emotional heartfelt write
God Bless you
Clare

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Allysa
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In an upside-down garden
5 posted 2002-04-12 03:27 PM


Thanks everyone.
This is about a girl in my PS class.
She's excellent.
She counsels people who have been raped and shares her story with them.  
I admire her.

Don't let your mind wander, it's much to small to be out by itself.

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