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Jenn Cirrincione
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0 posted 2002-04-07 12:02 PM


Licking your lips
Reaching for my hand
Missing me as I walk away-
I can feel you watching.

Your charm can drop 'em like flies
Over and over
One by one
to their knees.

So you believe,
you got me too.
Just another notch-
in that tacky belt?

Your eyes do travel-
that is certain
Down,down..down..
and to the floor.

So I smile sweetly,
and come up close.
And coyly whisper-
you wish

© Copyright 2002 Jennifer Parker - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-04-07 12:23 PM


Oh booya! LOL!

Loved it, Jenn. Ahh I could totally see that happening. Very cool indeed.

Keep 'em coming, chicka.

~AF~

"Sometimes the only way to stay sane is to go a little crazy." - Susanna Kaysen

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2 posted 2002-04-07 07:21 PM


Hahahahahahahahahahaha, I love it...I can jsut picture you doing...I can picture myself doing it too....great write


~Lisa

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3 posted 2002-04-07 07:26 PM


Ouch...  lol  That would suck...  lol  Anywho, nice write, it was funny and well written.  
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4 posted 2002-04-08 08:05 AM



Thanks guys. hehe

"I can't get you out of my head- your love is all I think about."

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5 posted 2002-04-08 12:29 PM


"So I smile sweetly,
and come up close.
And coyly whisper-
you wish"

KNARF!
Splendid job.

~ Titus

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6 posted 2002-04-08 02:00 PM


Hehehe you go girl!! WHat a cute poem!!! I really liked this

iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf..

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7 posted 2002-04-10 03:09 PM


'Just another notch-
in that tacky belt?'

oooh...

i love that line.

::grins::

/jen/

so foul and fair a day i have not seen.  - macbeth act 1, scene 3

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8 posted 2002-04-10 06:15 PM


Thanks everyone... Ya'all are so good to me.
I really needed to get this out..thanks Vicki for the inspiration.

Jenn

"I can't get you out of my head- your love is all I think about."

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9 posted 2002-04-10 11:25 PM



Jenn-
This is great!  I love it.
Glad you were able to get this one out,
and you did it with a touch of humor.
Gotta love that.
Thanks for the smile and the laugh.
Hugs,
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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10 posted 2002-04-11 01:00 AM


hehehhe..you tell em girl!   much enjoyed

The feeling of Sleepiness when you're not in bed, and can't get there, is the meanest feeling in the world.-- Edgar Waston Howe

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