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I'm falling...

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Voiceless
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Under the stars upon the wind


0 posted 03-30-2002 01:15 AM       View Profile for Voiceless   Email Voiceless   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Voiceless


I told myself I couldn't..
But of course I did.
I really knew I shouldn't..
But who was I to kid?

I started down a path.
I already know where it will end.
I think of it everytime we laugh.
For soon we will reach the bend.

I want to hold on forever.
The problem is do you?
I keep saying never say never.
But that just wouldn't be true..

How do I take the fall,
without ever landing?
You name I want to call,
but yet I remain silently standing.

I am trapped in confusion.
Do you care?
Is this just an illusion?
Life just isn't fair.

For now I can't say it.
So I'll write it instead.
The pieces have begun to fit.
I am scared the outcome you may dread.

For you I am falling.
Can't you tell?
Nevermind I stalling,
I already fell.

( Hey everyone, I haven't written anything in awhile
but I needed to write something about this, because
well i am crazy about him, who knows with him though)

Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial)

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1 posted 03-30-2002 01:55 AM       View Profile for punkrockerrobin   Email punkrockerrobin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit punkrockerrobin's Home Page   View IP for punkrockerrobin

girl if he ain't gonna love you for you ten kick him to the curb!

i am me don't tell me different!!
JEFF IS ONE HOT STUD *RAWR*
i want him *DROOLZ*
dam hes hott!!!

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tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs


2 posted 03-30-2002 11:28 AM       View Profile for xShUgArHiGhx   Email xShUgArHiGhx   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit xShUgArHiGhx's Home Page   View IP for xShUgArHiGhx

Awesome write and nice to see you writing again!!! Loved the poem..keep up the great work!

iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf..

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3 posted 03-31-2002 06:50 AM       View Profile for katherine   Email katherine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for katherine

this is really good. good luck with it all and if he hasn't fallen make him!
Voiceless
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4 posted 03-31-2002 04:22 PM       View Profile for Voiceless   Email Voiceless   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Voiceless

Well the question now is,
do I give it to him?
I am extremely nervous,
what do you guys think?
Thank's for the replies I really
appreciate it.

Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial)

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5 posted 03-31-2002 08:02 PM       View Profile for LCBS   Email LCBS   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LCBS

For you I am falling.
Can't you tell?
Nevermind I stalling,
I already fell.
OOO I loved that stanza...great job voiceless, I enjoyed this thoroughly!!

Great Job!

~Lisa
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6 posted 03-31-2002 11:19 PM       View Profile for Voiceless   Email Voiceless   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Voiceless

Well I sent it to him..
Now I am just really nervous..
Thanks again!

Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial)

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7 posted 04-01-2002 04:30 PM       View Profile for PoetryIsLife   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PoetryIsLife

Very impressive!

Nice flow, nice stanza's and shape, form, et all. Loved the ending:

"For you I am falling.
Can't you tell?
Nevermind I'm stalling,
I already fell."

Superb ending. Very splendid.
Love is risk.... without taking chances you'll never get rewards. But with risk comes... risk of pain, hurt, et all. Indeed.

How are things going? Did he respond?

~ Titus

"My body is merely the canvas of my soul."
         ~ The Night Owl

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you have me baby, always and forever
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