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Impulse Pro
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since 2002-03-22
Posts 25
Mass,USA

0 posted 2002-03-25 02:45 PM



There he was on the side of the rode
He was talking in some retarded code
Every time I ever walked by I always beat him down

Kiddingly I pushed him around while I saw that stupid frown
I did not know one day he would save my life
Did I think he would take that knife

Know I sit here feeling guilt
Now waiting for his coffin to be built
One day while in a fight
While kicking whith all my might

One kid took out a knife and swung it at me
Not knowing that the retard took that hit for me
Everyone said that he would not make it

Why I wonder did he take it
And know I sit all alone
Not even to thank him on the phone
That retard knew what was going on
Even though he let my life go on
Did he forgive me..probably so.but I will never know

© Copyright 2002 Justin M - All Rights Reserved
LCBS
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since 2001-11-29
Posts 532
Connecticut
1 posted 2002-03-25 02:50 PM


I like the poem....I like the story it tells...but is it a true story, or symbolism?

Good Job..

~Lisa

Dunphy
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since 2002-03-14
Posts 82
Massachusetts USA
2 posted 2002-03-26 10:11 AM


you know it reminse me a lot livin in tha city. i seen a lotta that. iss sad. you di a greate job ki keep'em cummin. i enjoyed the read.

                  from kevin reid
                 aka dunphy

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3 posted 2002-03-26 11:10 PM


Awesome story!!!! Great job on this...loved it!! Keep up the awesome work!!

iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf..

keoni
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since 2000-10-16
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Up in the mountains in the NFC
4 posted 2002-03-27 12:25 PM


This is a really sad story. Made for a great poem though. Good job.
Jon

"Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur
"Sometimes it takes a painful loss to realize you are free"- Bouncing Souls

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