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Spine Grinder
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Standing In Silence...

0 posted 2002-03-24 08:06 PM



Making plans the night before,
Waiting for you to come through the door.
Sat there waiting and you never showed,
And the tears never once slowed.
I had a dream I was alone,
I saw you sitting on your throne.
Scepter in one hand and sword in its sheath,
You just stared at me and I fell beneath.
Beneath the rocking waves of my tears,
I thought of all the days and wasted years.
Trying to chase you down those caves,
Past all those faded and dead graves.
I couldn’t catch you, I fell behind,
I’ve lost my security and maybe my mind.
My mind has been invaded,
My heart feels so jaded.
Somebody help me out of here,
Before I begin to feel this fear.
I stand alone in this place,
Staring danger in its face.
Come and get me is all I said,
I started to run -my legs felt like molten lead.
You followed me to the stream,
I dove in and was out of the dream.
I awoke with a cold sweat,
The sheets and covers were soaking wet…..

~If u luv something, let it go,if it comes back 2 u, its urs, if it doesnt, it never wuz..~DMX

© Copyright 2002 Staci Weidner - All Rights Reserved
LCBS
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since 2001-11-29
Posts 532
Connecticut
1 posted 2002-03-24 09:13 PM


This was really good, it showed pain an disillusenment...cool! great write

~Lisa

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tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs
2 posted 2002-03-27 06:14 PM


It has a lot of striggle in it and sadness..i liked how you epressed yourself. Loved it and amazing job!! Thanks for sharing this!

iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf..

vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...
3 posted 2002-04-18 03:32 AM



Spine Grinder-
This is a well written piece.
It drew me in and held me through to the last word.
Nicely done.
Hugs,
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

peachesNcream
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since 2001-08-21
Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears
4 posted 2002-04-24 04:36 PM


omfg mogo! LMAO!! that was da greatest poem u wrote yet!!!! cereally!!! i loved it soooo much...!!!!!!! woweeee lol all mi love ~Jess

~*~Never take anything for granted~*~

Spine Grinder
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since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...
5 posted 2002-04-24 08:43 PM


thank u all 4 replying 2 my poem and i'm glad u all liked it, jess, ur so strange lol!!!

~if you want me to fall for you, you gotta give me something worth tripping over~

Impulse Pro
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since 2002-03-22
Posts 25
Mass,USA
6 posted 2002-04-25 05:10 PM


great poem!
Sabriel.s.h.lover
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since 2001-04-16
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b.f.e. aka- Hickville
7 posted 2002-04-27 09:09 PM


Staci...man this poem just kicks ass. its so freakin awesome...it jsut kinda takes over you!
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