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Ceinwyn
Member Elite

since 2000-07-09

Posts 2175
VA

0 posted 2002-03-23 11:02 AM

You say that
My words
And my life
Clash
That I'm just another {edit} cliche
And my tears
Are bitter
Yet sweet
So perhaps you wouldn't mind
If I offered you
Another bittersweet glass of lemonade
That my soul produced
Just for the likes of you
I'll add more sugar
If you so desire
Or perhaps watch your face wither
As your body is
Slowly attacked by the bitterness
Of my true raw emotions
Next time
You'll watch what you say
And next time
I'll just spit in your face
And throw you back
Where you {edit} belong

[This message has been edited by Ceinwyn (03-23-2002 11:03 AM).]

PoetryIsLife

Senior Member

since 2001-10-27

Posts 1763
...in my boxers...

1 posted 2002-03-23 01:59 PM

Whoa, Kristen, POWERFUL. Very strong, and biter. Enjoyed.

*walks off to email kristen*

~ Titus

"My body is merely the canvas of my soul."
~ The Night Owl

LCBS
Senior Member

since 2001-11-29

Posts 532
Connecticut

2 posted 2002-03-23 02:36 PM

Kris!

Wow, I love the metaphor, and I loved the poem....email or get online, we'll talk

~Lisa

quietlydying

Senior Member

since 2001-06-10

Posts 935
the wonderful land of oz

3 posted 2002-03-24 01:53 AM

very emotional.

i do like.

/jen/

so foul and fair a day i have not seen. - macbeth act 1, scene 3

Skyfire

Member Elite

since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

4 posted 2002-03-24 02:46 AM

"And next time
I'll just spit in your face"

Woohoo! Way to tell it like it is! Wow. Raw, powerful, and well-written. Thanks for that refreshing read; haven't read something that bitter in quite a bit in here! I'm sorry that you were screwed over like that... Don't need 'im anyway!

Hopelessly in love

Starr
Member

since 2001-02-08

Posts 100

5 posted 2002-03-24 04:42 AM

Really powerful... Could honestly feel it.. Good write here... However sorry for your pain

Hope you cheer up

Misty (not name just a nick)

Every action of our lives touches some chord that will vibrate in eternity.

keoni
Senior Member

since 2000-10-16

Posts 850
Up in the mountains in the NFC

6 posted 2002-03-24 12:35 PM

Yeah! That's what I'm talking about. This one kicked ass. Very strong, I loved it
Jon

"Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur
"Sometimes it takes a painful loss to realize you are free"- Bouncing Souls

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