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Dark Enchantress
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meet Morgana

0 posted 2002-03-18 09:21 PM


Would you pretend
to know me well
but then turn away
when they mock my
personal style –
I get confused with
everybody and my
supposed crimes
Full speed ahead -
Do you find your eyes
lingering on my face?
I’m amazed at my own
maturity despite my lack
of knowing anything at all
Sickly in this skin –
bruising my soul like
some hammer hitting hard
Hard hitter, would I ask,
please give me more
Then I’d lick your wounds
that I personally placed
there on your skin
with my nails
and venomous tongue
This is what we get
for making me your
sadistic queen,
Visiting nightly like some
wet dream – Everything
you want me to be,
which is probably
nothing at all (for safer
circumstance) And
here I stand,
a magician with some
white rabbits – pulled
from my hat to
entertain you

3.18.02

"The most beautiful makeup for a woman is passion, but cosmetics are easier to buy." - Yves Saint Laurent

Cela passera.

turningthepage.blogspot

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LCBS
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since 2001-11-29
Posts 532
Connecticut
1 posted 2002-03-18 09:46 PM


WOW...this was written very well....I liked it a lot, and I can not wait to read more...

~Lisa

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...in my boxers...
2 posted 2002-03-18 10:09 PM


Damn, Yoda... I enjoyed it one immensaly.... quite dark piece. The attitude here just drips.... you seem to range from feeling bitter, to feeling insignificant... anger towards someone turns to pity... To stay with this poem requires seeing through it and grasping the whole picture.... just another glimpse of what you see in the mirror. Well done.

~ Titus

My motto... always changing, always improving, living life in veiw of eternity.

Dopey Dope
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San Juan, Puerto Rico
3 posted 2002-03-19 12:40 PM


Wow, pretty powerful here. I liked this one a lot!!! Very very well done. Impressive, the part that hit most was definitely the end. Hope to see more.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

ShortSexyAngelOnEarth
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since 2001-12-24
Posts 36
im a louisiana cajun princess! lol
4 posted 2002-03-19 01:21 AM


awesome job, look forward to reading more.
cherish
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since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........
5 posted 2002-03-19 06:13 PM


*is loving this*.......*clicks on the library*...see hoe youve managed to leave me speechless?

My england is goodly- are you strudable?

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