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Ceinwyn
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0 posted 2002-03-14 10:12 PM


This is stupid..I apologize makes no sense but what does anymore?

Lost in confusion
Rainbow lost
No longer found
Within my dreams
Listen to me
Tell me
Explain yourself
Who are you
Where do you come from
And what do you
Intend to do to with my heart?

Not quite sure
How much longer  I can endure
This thorn
That pierces my soul
This rose
I hold within the palm of my hands
I'm close to letting go
Let it wither
Let it die
Amongst the coldness
Found within my eyes
Please explain yourself
Before I truly give up
And force myself to close up my soul
And force my heart to say goodbye...

© Copyright 2002 Kristen Brandon - All Rights Reserved
LCBS
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1 posted 2002-03-14 10:35 PM


Hmmmmm....this look familiar Kris!!!!

Hey _____= _______ Thats all you have to remember!  

I've already told you everything I thought....this jsut comes from the heart, so its perfect...

~Lisa

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2 posted 2002-03-14 11:59 PM


Kristen

Enjoyed the write. As usual... you have a superb ability to put your emotions into your poetry well. Looking foward to the next time we chat...

~ Titus


In My Mind's Eye, In My Mind's Eye...

[This message has been edited by PoetryIsLife (03-15-2002 12:00 AM).]

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3 posted 2002-03-15 11:29 AM


This seemed to make sense to me! you always do a great job of putting your feelings and emotions into your writing. Great job as usual!

iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf..

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4 posted 2002-03-16 09:21 AM


I am sure this relates to a guy but it can also be a good analysis of yourself. The first half of the piece is excellently written with just enough questions and minimal answers. The way you delve into yourself and put it out for everyone to see is great.

Thanks for the read. much enjoyed.

~AF~

"Sometimes the only way to stay sane is to go a little crazy." - Susanna Kaysen

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5 posted 2002-03-18 10:56 PM


I like how you written this, VERY well done.

"This thorn
That pierces my soul
This rose
I hold within the palm of my hands
I'm close to letting go
Let it wither
Let it die
Amongst the coldness
Found within my eyes"

"Dont piss me off, Im runing out of places to hide the bodies."

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