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CwboyAtHeart
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0 posted 2002-03-12 08:01 PM


Howdy.  I just wrote this one, not really about anybody in particular, just something off of my head, I guess.  Let me know what you think.

DEPRESSION

Darkness rises in her heart
Extinguising her greatest dreams
Pushing to things she never wanted
Repeatedly making her question
Every person she ever loved and trusted
Sending her world in a downward spiral
Still not realizing all she could be
If only she had not listened to the world
Once she was a beautifully blooming daisy
Now she is closer to a withering rose

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LCBS
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1 posted 2002-03-12 08:07 PM


Wow this was written really well and I can relate to it a lot.  I really like it...

~lisa

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2 posted 2002-03-13 10:04 AM


I really enjoyed the read, I like Acrostics (sp?) and I enjoyed reading this one. Thank you for sharing it with us

Andrew

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3 posted 2002-03-13 03:50 PM


Wow.
Erin
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4 posted 2002-03-13 04:20 PM


I like this one!

~It TaKeS a MiNuTe To LiKe SoMeOnE, aN hOuR tO hAvE a CrUsH oN sOmEoNe & A dAy To FaLl In LoVe, BuT iT tAkEs A lIfEtImE tO fOrGeT sOmEoNe

Cinderelly
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5 posted 2002-03-14 12:38 PM


I really like this one . . . I can totally relate! Great write!

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6 posted 2002-03-14 08:04 AM


Well said!!!! ::hugs::

iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf..

Lisa_bebe15
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7 posted 2002-03-15 12:31 PM


I really did like this..It was really good..I miss your writing..I may not leave a note..but i do read it..and I like your username..

"Water Over Matter"

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8 posted 2002-03-16 09:35 AM


If only she had not listened to the world
Once she was a beautifully blooming daisy
Now she is closer to a withering rose


Isn't that the truth? Depression...it's a touchy subject and often hard to write about to certain extents. You've been creative AND managed to capture a lot of how people feel in one hit. Nice job.

Hope to see more from you soon, Cody.

~AF~

"Sometimes the only way to stay sane is to go a little crazy." - Susanna Kaysen

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9 posted 2002-03-17 03:26 PM


hey cody! good job, i really liked this one a lot, i related to some of it. your one of my good friends, and you know some stuff in life has made it where i havent written anything in forever, but this inspired somthin else. thanks a ton. bye!

maryn

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